ImClueless
Apr 7, 2014
Undergraduate / The Broken Boy / CommonApp Essay - Background [7]
Here's what I have after some editing:
I still remember the looks of horror that my parents gave me when I was five years old. When I would walk, they watched with pained faces as they tried to solve the mystery of my limp. They took me to the hospital, but I needed a specialist. Eventually doctors discovered my problem; my femoral head was dying. The lack of blood flow slowly extinguished the life in the bone, and it began to collapse under the weight it was built to hold. The doctor diagnosed me with severe Legg-Calve Perthes disease, a discovery that changed my life forever.
From that day on, everything was different. I was no longer allowed to walk; I had to use a wheelchair or crutches. To make the situation worse, a few months later I went to my first day of Kindergarten. To say the least, I was devastated. Not only was I away from my parents for the first time in my life, but everywhere I turned there were children staring with alien eyes, trying to figure out what was wrong with the kid in the wheelchair. As days past, it got easier; people were interested in me, so they wheeled me around outside as they attempted to figure me out. I thought that my alienation would never end, but eventually good news came, and I was happy just long enough to have my dreams crushed.
The doctors said that my hip was finally recovering. My parents were told that I could walk unaided, or use crutches from time to time if necessary. I remember how excited I was to go back to school the next day, use the playground, and make new friends, but it never happened. I walked out that day and began to climb the stairs to the slide beside the faces that had surrounded me for months, but before I ever got a chance to use the spiraling piece of beige plastic, my arm was caught in the supervisor's iron grip. She walked me to the edge of the grass where I was told to wait. Soon my mother was at my side explaining everything. I wasn't allowed to use the playground, I wasn't allowed to participate in P.E., and I wasn't even allowed to walk around at recess. So I sat, three times a day for over three years.
I quickly got over the fact that I was not allowed to be normal, and I began something that the others wouldn't for years, I sat and learned. While everybody was exercising their legs, I was exercising my brain; they were free to run, but so was my mind. By the time everybody else was finishing addition, I had already taught myself algebra. When it came to vocabulary, nobody could beat the kid that read for hours every day. The exhilaration that I received from learning a new fact was indescribable, and I never wanted to stop.
Eventually, through my father, I discovered engineering. I would often sit and try to decipher his works as a geotechnical engineer - a daunting task that I still have not completed. I used kits to build circuits, and Lego's to implement my ideas in reality. At school, it became harder to relate with the other kids until I found friends that I still have today through my school's highly capable program, which was designed to bring people like me together. My isolation was over.
I stayed steadily ahead of the other students through elementary and middle school, developing my hobbies in my free time, and then I reached high school. It disoriented me at first, but after I came to understand the system, I loved it. High school leveled the playing field by letting students of all ages and levels mix, and I was able to challenge myself as much as I wanted. I used my passion to my advantage and began taking every science and math class I could, it was wonderful. Now I am out of classes to challenge me and I need a new place to sate my hunger for knowledge that began with my days in solitude at the edge of the grass.
Here's what I have after some editing:
I still remember the looks of horror that my parents gave me when I was five years old. When I would walk, they watched with pained faces as they tried to solve the mystery of my limp. They took me to the hospital, but I needed a specialist. Eventually doctors discovered my problem; my femoral head was dying. The lack of blood flow slowly extinguished the life in the bone, and it began to collapse under the weight it was built to hold. The doctor diagnosed me with severe Legg-Calve Perthes disease, a discovery that changed my life forever.
From that day on, everything was different. I was no longer allowed to walk; I had to use a wheelchair or crutches. To make the situation worse, a few months later I went to my first day of Kindergarten. To say the least, I was devastated. Not only was I away from my parents for the first time in my life, but everywhere I turned there were children staring with alien eyes, trying to figure out what was wrong with the kid in the wheelchair. As days past, it got easier; people were interested in me, so they wheeled me around outside as they attempted to figure me out. I thought that my alienation would never end, but eventually good news came, and I was happy just long enough to have my dreams crushed.
The doctors said that my hip was finally recovering. My parents were told that I could walk unaided, or use crutches from time to time if necessary. I remember how excited I was to go back to school the next day, use the playground, and make new friends, but it never happened. I walked out that day and began to climb the stairs to the slide beside the faces that had surrounded me for months, but before I ever got a chance to use the spiraling piece of beige plastic, my arm was caught in the supervisor's iron grip. She walked me to the edge of the grass where I was told to wait. Soon my mother was at my side explaining everything. I wasn't allowed to use the playground, I wasn't allowed to participate in P.E., and I wasn't even allowed to walk around at recess. So I sat, three times a day for over three years.
I quickly got over the fact that I was not allowed to be normal, and I began something that the others wouldn't for years, I sat and learned. While everybody was exercising their legs, I was exercising my brain; they were free to run, but so was my mind. By the time everybody else was finishing addition, I had already taught myself algebra. When it came to vocabulary, nobody could beat the kid that read for hours every day. The exhilaration that I received from learning a new fact was indescribable, and I never wanted to stop.
Eventually, through my father, I discovered engineering. I would often sit and try to decipher his works as a geotechnical engineer - a daunting task that I still have not completed. I used kits to build circuits, and Lego's to implement my ideas in reality. At school, it became harder to relate with the other kids until I found friends that I still have today through my school's highly capable program, which was designed to bring people like me together. My isolation was over.
I stayed steadily ahead of the other students through elementary and middle school, developing my hobbies in my free time, and then I reached high school. It disoriented me at first, but after I came to understand the system, I loved it. High school leveled the playing field by letting students of all ages and levels mix, and I was able to challenge myself as much as I wanted. I used my passion to my advantage and began taking every science and math class I could, it was wonderful. Now I am out of classes to challenge me and I need a new place to sate my hunger for knowledge that began with my days in solitude at the edge of the grass.