Writing Feedback / GRE ISSUE: Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning [3]

ISSUE TOPIC:Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
my answer:
Many people say that compete for high scores will force students to just learn the knowledge that will appear in the test. So as to have a great score, students learn how to take exams instead of learning knowledge. This way of competition for high grades will bring negative impact on the quality of learning. However, I think competition in a good way can contribute to the acquirement of knowledge and skill instead of limits it. There are three reasons to support my point of view.

Competition for high grades needs people to acquire and accumulate more knowledge and skill. Students will need to have more experience and be good at what he has been studying in his field in order to get a good score. For example, taking GRE exam, one must learn and practice writing, reading, comprehends, logical skill. You also need to accumulate vocabulary, enhance your knowledge about math, grammar of English and so on. It also can imply to learn other subjects at school. Students need to acquire basic knowledge like you must know an equation to solve a math problem. Also in the progress of learning, it will enhance his learning skill. It also helps to improve the quality of learning.

Competition also helps to training a person's power of will. If someone want to be an expert or be good in the field or subjects he takes in, he need to spend much time and effort on it, that is, he or she will need to work harder and continually study every day. For example, If a student want to have a good score on math, he or she will need to do a lot of works like solving math problems.

Furthermore, in reality, you need to have a good grade as a student. For it is one of the factors that a company or a college will see a student is good or not. The grades you have at school in some respect reflect your performance in learning and how hard you put an effort into. For example, there are thousands of people who want to get a job at a big corporation need to take an exam first like Samsung. There is a minimum requirement of GPA for the students who want to enroll in a graduate program in university, and more higher GPA for apply the scholarship.

Generally speaking, competition for high grades does help to the quality of learning. However, if requiring too much for high grades will limit a student's ability to learning other skill in his or her life.

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Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Universities offer people opportunity to learn and improve their skills [7]

Topic:People attend college or unversity for many different reasons(for example, new experience, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specofoc resons and details to suport your answer?

People attend universities for many reasons. There are three reasons that I believed most people attend for are prepare for careers, increasing their knowledge and improve their ability.

Most people consider preparing for careers as the most important reason. Students will learn more knowledge and skill during the period of studying in the university. They learn the knowledge that are relevant to their career in the future. For example, Students will need to learn many lessons such as medicine, chemistry and so on if they want to be a doctor in the future. They will have more experience in the area they want to study. They need to practice their skill in the school more and more to adopt themselves to the environment which their job maybe looks like. For example, Students who study biology need to do experiment in the lab to practice their skill such as operating machine, knowing the methods and so on.

Another reason is that they can increase their knowledge. Students will take many subjects in class. They will learn the basic knowledge that is relevant to their careers. Students have to broaden their view toward global perspective. The university offer dual degree program. They also can learn different area of knowledge in the university to enhance their knowledge. There are many interdisciplinary fields of two or more area in the industry like bioinformation involve computer and biology, biomedical engineering involve biology, medicine, physics, and machinery.

Last but not least, people can improve their skill in the university. Students can improve their communicate skill by interact with their classmates, teachers. They can improve organize skill by organize an activity or event. They also can improve their independent thinking during studying in classes.

Generally, Universities offer people opportunity to learn and improve their skills, knowledge and the ability. So People can prepare themselves to be more competitive for the career. I think these reasons are most people attend university.