Book Reports / The Color of Water symbolism of "a bird that flies" [2]

Hey, you have a good start here on this. Let me summarize a few of the things that I have noticed:

1. Verb tense agreement: You have to use the same verb tense throughout your writing. Ruth voiced her distaste for this tradition. Mameh had said: "that chicken is just . In this small excerpt you have used past tense to refer to Ruth's perspectives but have used the past perfect tense for Mameh's perspectives. (Past perfect tense involves the verb "have". Mameh "had" said. You could have said, Mameh said.)

2. Contractions: polio and couldn't do everything Do not use slang or contractions in formal writing. Here you could write "could not".

3. Content: From the perspective of content you might want to explore Mameh struggle as a "bird that cannot fly" and how Ruth was able to escape this whereas Mameh's physical condition would not allow it.

You might do well in the future to consult an editing or proofreading service (NOT a writing service) to assist you to clarify thoughts and grammar.

N.Hill
Sr. Editor,
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