jay bajarang
Aug 30, 2014
Writing Feedback / Ielts 2- Rise in crimes committed by young people in cities [3]
Your over all content is good but your introduction is too short . It just end up in 2 lines, so u must make it upto 5 lines. you have written "The third reason is, due increase ". In place of this it must be "The third reason is, due to increase..." . Anyways ideas are good and i will like to rate it 8.
Your over all content is good but your introduction is too short . It just end up in 2 lines, so u must make it upto 5 lines. you have written "The third reason is, due increase ". In place of this it must be "The third reason is, due to increase..." . Anyways ideas are good and i will like to rate it 8.