StephanieGreer
Jun 9, 2014
Writing Feedback / Nuclear weapons, boon or curse ? [6]
INVENTION OF NUCLEAR WEAPONS
Nuclear weapons are considered by some to be the most pernicious form of weaponry and there is much controversy surrounding the aftermath of its invention. The first nuclear weapon, the nuclear bomb, was contrived by the United States of America in 1945. Not three weeks later, the world witnessed a catastrophic and gruesome incident- The Hiroshima and Nagasaki shelling. Americans dropped two nuclear bombs during these events , expeditiously and in a rather sacrilegious way , putting an end to the Pacific War. Ever since then, a myriad of countries have started concocting their own nuclear weapons. Irrefutably, the question arises, what effects nuclear weapons have on global peace and stability.
A multitude of countries, in an attempt to protect their various rights and to fortify their defenses , have begun to manufacture nuclear weapons. There are five states classified as "Nuclear Superpowers" under Nuclear Non-Proliferation Treaty and an approximately ten others which have successfully detonated nuclear weapons in the past. When there are advancements in technology and science, there are also advancements in military weapons. Many countries, fearful of being dominated by other nuclear states, are forced to manufacture their own nuclear weapons. Hence, we arrive at an incontrovertible conclusion that militarization with respect to nuclear weapons is at an augment <- use a different word, doesn't make sense here .
In my opinion, deploying nuclear artillery and manufacturing such weapons of mass destruction is deleterious to world peace and stability. It exacerbates the tensions between nations with historically unsatisfactory relations and strains ties between conciliatory nations. Moreover, countries have a propensity to use nuclear weapons as means of attack since they do cataclysmic destruction and its after-effects prevail on in generations to come. <what example do you have on this, only 2 nuclear devises have been deployed and you listed above, how do the nation have a propensity to use them?> Hence, it has become highly probable that an inconsequential activity might trigger a brutal nuclear war, precipitating devastatingly unreasonable consequences. Nuclear weapons therefore in no way set parameters for achieving global peace.
Before concluding, I'd like to elucidate that nuclear technology can be used for meritorious suchas the generation of electricity. It is of the utmost importance to prohibit manufacturing of nuclear weapons as they drive us away from the ultimate goal of achieving global peace. United Nations must play a pro-active role in demilitarizing nuclear states and establishing more Nuclear-Free Territory Zones, adding to the contemporary five, and to foster peaceful settlement of disputes. All in all, we need to demean the chances of another war, which would claim a gargantuan number of lives and cause much more destruction than previous wars.
Just a comment, it seems like you are using a thesaurus to switch out words and it doesn't always work. It makes your argument lose focus instead of making a direct point. This is a great argument just make sure you can back up what you say. Good luck!
INVENTION OF NUCLEAR WEAPONS
Nuclear weapons are considered by some to be the most pernicious form of weaponry and there is much controversy surrounding the aftermath of its invention. The first nuclear weapon, the nuclear bomb, was contrived by the United States of America in 1945. Not three weeks later, the world witnessed a catastrophic and gruesome incident- The Hiroshima and Nagasaki shelling. Americans dropped two nuclear bombs during these events , expeditiously and in a rather sacrilegious way , putting an end to the Pacific War. Ever since then, a myriad of countries have started concocting their own nuclear weapons. Irrefutably, the question arises, what effects nuclear weapons have on global peace and stability.
A multitude of countries, in an attempt to protect their various rights and to fortify their defenses , have begun to manufacture nuclear weapons. There are five states classified as "Nuclear Superpowers" under Nuclear Non-Proliferation Treaty and an approximately ten others which have successfully detonated nuclear weapons in the past. When there are advancements in technology and science, there are also advancements in military weapons. Many countries, fearful of being dominated by other nuclear states, are forced to manufacture their own nuclear weapons. Hence, we arrive at an incontrovertible conclusion that militarization with respect to nuclear weapons is at an augment <- use a different word, doesn't make sense here .
In my opinion, deploying nuclear artillery and manufacturing such weapons of mass destruction is deleterious to world peace and stability. It exacerbates the tensions between nations with historically unsatisfactory relations and strains ties between conciliatory nations. Moreover, countries have a propensity to use nuclear weapons as means of attack since they do cataclysmic destruction and its after-effects prevail on in generations to come. <what example do you have on this, only 2 nuclear devises have been deployed and you listed above, how do the nation have a propensity to use them?> Hence, it has become highly probable that an inconsequential activity might trigger a brutal nuclear war, precipitating devastatingly unreasonable consequences. Nuclear weapons therefore in no way set parameters for achieving global peace.
Before concluding, I'd like to elucidate that nuclear technology can be used for meritorious suchas the generation of electricity. It is of the utmost importance to prohibit manufacturing of nuclear weapons as they drive us away from the ultimate goal of achieving global peace. United Nations must play a pro-active role in demilitarizing nuclear states and establishing more Nuclear-Free Territory Zones, adding to the contemporary five, and to foster peaceful settlement of disputes. All in all, we need to demean the chances of another war, which would claim a gargantuan number of lives and cause much more destruction than previous wars.
Just a comment, it seems like you are using a thesaurus to switch out words and it doesn't always work. It makes your argument lose focus instead of making a direct point. This is a great argument just make sure you can back up what you say. Good luck!
