Undergraduate / 2014 Reed College Entrance Essay (Why Reed) from a perspective Chinese major. [3]

In the first paragraph I would go into more detail about why you want to study chinese, not just stating that Reed has a good program. I thought the second paragraph was a nice addition and I wouldn't change anything in that! In the third paragraph I would take out anything that talks down on the south, while it may be true, you never know who your admissions officer is, and you don't want them to think you're stereotyping. Instead, just emphasize how the university made you feel welcome and talk about how you think you would fit in there. Overall great essay, just needs a bit of tweaking!