america7373
Oct 5, 2014
Undergraduate / What motivates you to seek admittance to a Service Academy and your career plans in the military? [8]
thank you sooo much!!
thank you sooo much!!
america7373
Oct 5, 2014
Undergraduate / What motivates you to seek admittance to a Service Academy and your career plans in the military? [8]
yes thank you for that intro sentence! i deleted that other sentence that I had following the quote and put it into my conclusion
Enrolling in the academy will ensure that I will become one of the greatest military generals on the battlefront in the future.
yes thank you for that intro sentence! i deleted that other sentence that I had following the quote and put it into my conclusion
america7373
Oct 4, 2014
Undergraduate / What motivates you to seek admittance to a Service Academy and your career plans in the military? [8]
Please help me revise/change/ or give input on my essay for a nomination to a service academy. I'm applying for both the USMA and the USAFA.
Prompt: Why do you want to attend a service academy?/ What motivates you to seek admittance to a Service Academy and your career plans in the military?
Thank you!!
Freedom is a beacon of hope to those people who are unable to enjoy the privileges that Americans have in this country. However, the cost for freedom is not free. Attending a service academy will provide the opportunity and privilege of serving my country and ensure safety and freedom of our great nation, and for the world.
911 is unquestionably the most tragic act of terrorism to happen on American soil. Although I was only four years old at the time, this event has left a lasting impact on me in several ways. I recently visited the Flight 93 National Memorial in Shanksville, Pennsylvania, with my classmates on a spiritual emphasis retreat. Visiting this memorial gave me a realistic viewpoint of the 911 tragedy. The plane crashed less than two hours from where I live. Particularly sobering was seeing the name of a woman passenger who was pregnant. My own mother was pregnant with my younger brother at that same time. Issac was born in November of 2001; that unnamed baby did not have the privilege of birth. Engraved in the grey, granite wall is "Lauren Grandcolas and unborn child" is a somber remembrance of this horrific calamity.
Terrorism still surrounds us and its threat to rises through the radical movements of those who hate America's freedom. More recently in 2013, the Boston Marathon bombing became another example of the possibility of terrorism on American soil. That attack occurred during my sophomore track season. Being a runner myself, I cannot even begin to imagine the horror of the sound of the blasts and sight of the chaos inflicted not only on runners but on bystanders as well.
The difference between the 911 attacks and the Boston Marathon bombing is the fact that the Boston bomber was a naturalized United States citizen. Individuals who become Americans take the Oath of Allegiance in which they swear to "support the Constitution and obey the laws of the U.S., renounce any foreign allegiance and/or foreign title, and bear arms for the Armed Forces of the U.S. or perform services for the government of the U.S. when required." Obviously, this oath was grossly disregarded .Terrorist ideals have infiltrated American society; even American citizen can be suspect. This points to a dire need for security in our country as well as abroad.
These acts of terrorism targeted instilling fear and panic throughout American communities. Currently, our nation is experiencing attacks aimed at civilians in the recent attacks by the Islamic State of Iraq and Syria (ISIS). Yet, bombs and terror cannot destroy the American way of life or our resolve. We are courageous people who stand for freedom and with the help of God, we can bring peace to our nation and to humanity.
Defending this freedom are the soldiers who fight to protect the privileges and opportunities only found in the United States of America. I want to join these men and woman who by their service make a difference. Attending a service academy will fulfill my ultimate aspiration of becoming a leader who will shield innocent victims from terrorism as I help promote unity among the countries of this earth.
Please help me revise/change/ or give input on my essay for a nomination to a service academy. I'm applying for both the USMA and the USAFA.
Prompt: Why do you want to attend a service academy?/ What motivates you to seek admittance to a Service Academy and your career plans in the military?
Thank you!!
Freedom is a beacon of hope to those people who are unable to enjoy the privileges that Americans have in this country. However, the cost for freedom is not free. Attending a service academy will provide the opportunity and privilege of serving my country and ensure safety and freedom of our great nation, and for the world.
911 is unquestionably the most tragic act of terrorism to happen on American soil. Although I was only four years old at the time, this event has left a lasting impact on me in several ways. I recently visited the Flight 93 National Memorial in Shanksville, Pennsylvania, with my classmates on a spiritual emphasis retreat. Visiting this memorial gave me a realistic viewpoint of the 911 tragedy. The plane crashed less than two hours from where I live. Particularly sobering was seeing the name of a woman passenger who was pregnant. My own mother was pregnant with my younger brother at that same time. Issac was born in November of 2001; that unnamed baby did not have the privilege of birth. Engraved in the grey, granite wall is "Lauren Grandcolas and unborn child" is a somber remembrance of this horrific calamity.
Terrorism still surrounds us and its threat to rises through the radical movements of those who hate America's freedom. More recently in 2013, the Boston Marathon bombing became another example of the possibility of terrorism on American soil. That attack occurred during my sophomore track season. Being a runner myself, I cannot even begin to imagine the horror of the sound of the blasts and sight of the chaos inflicted not only on runners but on bystanders as well.
The difference between the 911 attacks and the Boston Marathon bombing is the fact that the Boston bomber was a naturalized United States citizen. Individuals who become Americans take the Oath of Allegiance in which they swear to "support the Constitution and obey the laws of the U.S., renounce any foreign allegiance and/or foreign title, and bear arms for the Armed Forces of the U.S. or perform services for the government of the U.S. when required." Obviously, this oath was grossly disregarded .Terrorist ideals have infiltrated American society; even American citizen can be suspect. This points to a dire need for security in our country as well as abroad.
These acts of terrorism targeted instilling fear and panic throughout American communities. Currently, our nation is experiencing attacks aimed at civilians in the recent attacks by the Islamic State of Iraq and Syria (ISIS). Yet, bombs and terror cannot destroy the American way of life or our resolve. We are courageous people who stand for freedom and with the help of God, we can bring peace to our nation and to humanity.
Defending this freedom are the soldiers who fight to protect the privileges and opportunities only found in the United States of America. I want to join these men and woman who by their service make a difference. Attending a service academy will fulfill my ultimate aspiration of becoming a leader who will shield innocent victims from terrorism as I help promote unity among the countries of this earth.
