FoxAlec
Oct 13, 2014
Undergraduate / 'It was March 12th of 2006' - Coming to the US - CommonApp Essay [7]
Hello :) Very good easy, but
My knowledge about the US was that it was a country with "Golden Hills,"
You should not use was twice within the same sentence in this context. Try replacing one of them with a different word, or rewriting the phrase completely. For example, "My knowledge on the United States had been limited, and the only thing I heard is that it contains 'Golden Hills,"'
Hello :) Very good easy, but
You should not use was twice within the same sentence in this context. Try replacing one of them with a different word, or rewriting the phrase completely. For example, "My knowledge on the United States had been limited, and the only thing I heard is that it contains 'Golden Hills,"'