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Posts by Chppoin
Name: Ji
Joined: Oct 20, 2014
Last Post: Oct 30, 2014
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From: Taiyuan
School: NUC

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Chppoin   
Oct 30, 2014
Graduate / I used to enjoy the songs of busker on public transport in capital city of Indonesia - SOP [2]

This statement too exciting and vivid to indicate your ambition to chase your dream and fulfill your potential. Good luck for you...I am a fresh guy in this great website. Due to my low ability to give your some advice, I can only give your some motivation. Additional, I think you'd better put your topic sentence in front of your paragraph.
Chppoin   
Oct 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / Parents help their children to make decision [5]

There is no doubt that parents are the people who most care about their children in the world. Everything about their children they want to help their children to deal with, because parents think they have acquired a lot of experience from many years' process of life. Especially, nowadays, various temptation and information need young people to tackle with. However, from my perspective, I believe that replacement of their children's brain to make decision will be harmful for children's future. My reasons are listed below.

Parents's idea might be old-fashion in modern society. By that I mean, the time is belong with young people. Countless choices need children to address are be instilled much modern ethic. Even if their parents put heart and soul into helping their children, since the situation has changed very much, the decision made by the old "expert" might be proven not meet the modern requirement. For example, My parents love me very much and everything I am doing or will do that they want to involve in. Once, I was supposed to participate my best friend's birthday party, my mother told me I should prepare a serious gift like clock and so on. I accepted her advice and sent a very old-fashion clock. However, my friend did not like it because nowadays the clock means dead in his culture and it is a taboo as gift. Therefore, sometimes parents might not give our better suggestion. In contrast, children are supposed to more independence to make their own decision.

We cannot deny that rich experience our parents will have, but if they help us to deal with everything without limit, spoiling children will be disaster for their children's future rather than brightness.
Chppoin   
Oct 26, 2014
Writing Feedback / Parents help their children to make decision [5]

Thank you very much. This is a TEOFL essay. Additionally, this is my first time to post my essay on the website. I don't know the rules about how should I do. Anyway, Thank you so much and I will upload the rest of essay as soon as possible.
Chppoin   
Oct 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / Parents help their children to make decision [5]

Nowadays, children are supposed to main the ability of independence. More exactly, increasing pressure of life of work should be deal with by oneself. The skill that people decide to do many important things and judge ample of the significant choices are prone to be attained by themselves, because even though they are willing to ask for the assistance, their parents probably cannot help their children to solve every problem. Apart from the quantity of decision, the efficiency might be another obstruction of helping children to make decision. Specifically, the people usually work and live somewhere along with the big resources that contributes to their future, but there might be long distance from their parents. Therefore, in spite of technological communication tools like cellphone, their parents cannot give their children efficient assistance. It is because that everyone could not available to answer the phone at anytime in anywhere. Obvious, parents help their children to make decision may be old-fashion, more worst, it could lead bad effect on children's future.

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