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SuzyMartin

Jun 23, 2009

Essays / I'm having some trouble understanding my teacher's directions. [About theses] [13]

EF_Simone, she's on vacation and unreachable.

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I wrote this, is it okay?

Tub, Kenny and Framk edure the freezing hell of winter with terrible results, had the weather been a bit different things may have ended a bit better; placed in a severe and brutal environment, male camaraderie often leads to violent behavior.

SuzyMartin

Jun 23, 2009

Essays / I'm having some trouble understanding my teacher's directions. [About theses] [13]

So, let me make sure I'm correct. ""Placed in a severe and brutal environment, male camaraderie often leads to violent behavior."

" needs to be in the thesis but with other things to support it?

SuzyMartin

Jun 23, 2009

Essays / I'm having some trouble understanding my teacher's directions. [About theses] [13]

"Eveline's Catholic upbringing as a dutiful daughter makes impossible her hopes for a happier life."

"If Eveline had been born a male instead of a feamle, she might have escaped her unhappy homelife, as her brother did."

"Eveline, "trapped like a helpless animal" by her deathbed promise to her mother, is morally unable to break her vow and flee her miserable home to seek a new life for herself."

Those are my examples.

SuzyMartin

Jun 23, 2009

Essays / I'm having some trouble understanding my teacher's directions. [About theses] [13]

The examples are just examples of thesis statements though, nothing to do with this partcular story. Should I still post them?

SuzyMartin

Jun 23, 2009

Essays / I'm having some trouble understanding my teacher's directions. [About theses] [13]

My teacher sent us all this e-mail this morning.
"Essay Part One instructions
After reading the following instructions, you should see a list of the short stories that were assigned to read and discuss. The story that you choose for this assignment will be the one that you will work on for Part One and Two of the Essay assignment.

Because literary analysis can be difficult for many students, and summer semesters are too short to allow sufficient time for improvement of writing skills, Essay Part One assignment is structured for success!

I want you to be successful. I am giving you the theme that I want you to use as your theme sentence in your thesis statement. I have also provided the short fiction element I want you to focus on in your essay.

Use the theme wording exactly as I have written it. It should be the last part of your thesis statement structure. There are examples in the course lessons and the textbook. The example on page 14 - 17 is a good example of the correct thesis structure I am looking for.

If you can write a critical analysis thesis statement, correctly, you will have a solid foundation for your essay development.

Tobias Wolff's "Hunters in the Snow"- If you choose this story, use the following short fiction element and theme:
Short fiction element: Setting and Atmosphere
Theme: Placed in a severe and brutal environment, male camaraderie often leads to violent behavior."

This was already posted as Essay One information.

"Part 1 - A list of themes for the assigned short stories will be provided to you. You will be asked to choose one and compose a critical analysis thesis statement. You will also provide examples of evidence from the story to support your thesis statement and show correct MLA in-text documentation for each example."

So, know that you all know the facts, here's where I am confused. Must "Placed in a severe and brutal environment, male camaraderie often leads to violent behavior."" be included in my thesis statement? I guess I'm a bit confused about how to include it if it must be. I really apreciate everyone's help. =)