jayj
Oct 31, 2014
Undergraduate / Whenever I went to summer camp we always played fish bowl - Penn supplement [3]
thanks!
thanks!
jayj
Oct 31, 2014
Undergraduate / Whenever I went to summer camp we always played fish bowl - Penn supplement [3]
The Admissions Committee would like to learn why you are a good fit for your undergraduate school choice (College of Arts and Sciences, School of Nursing, The Wharton School, or Penn Engineering). Please tell us about specific academic, service, and/or research opportunities at the University of Pennsylvania that resonate with your background, interests, and goals. (400-650 words)
Please help!!!!
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I love a good argument, or more like a good debate. Whenever I went to summer camp we always played fish bowl. We were presented with a topic and two of us debated it out. My list of points would go on and on and I always enjoyed it. Being older, that is still something I love to do. This is why one of my goals is to go to law school. Specifically I want to go into family law.
Becoming a part of the College of Arts and Sciences will help me to achieve this goal. I want to major in PPE. This would allow me to apply my skills to my field of work. With my passion for the things I love I know I will be able to achieve this goal with the help of some of the top professors. I could also further my studies by minoring in one of the PPE fields. I would be working along with Dr.Sen who would help me with any thing PPE related.
Another interest of mine is volunteer work. The rewarding feeling of helping others is something I look forward to. If accepted into Civic House, I would be fulfilling this feeling. I truly believe a small group of people can change the world. Working alongside a diverse, close group of people only adds to that rewarding feeling. I know we would be able to bring about change in the community if apart of this experience. Every year I volunteer at the clothes closet in my city. We give school uniforms to those that need them. It feels good being able to help those who are in need. This keeps me grateful and humble for the things I have.
Volunteer work keeps me appreciative for my life. I thank God for everything I have. Joining the NSP will keep my relationship with God growing. This is another rewarding feeling. I would be spreading the love of God my favorite way-through song. I would love to bring that feeling to other students on and off campus. This would keep me grounded and hopeful for the future while studying at the College.
As a part of the College of Arts and Sciences, I know I could bring about change on the campus and in the community. I am passionate about the things I do and put my all into everything. I believe this is important in living a successful, Godly life. Studying at the University of Pennsylvania will help me to achieve my goals and further my many interests. <END>
The Admissions Committee would like to learn why you are a good fit for your undergraduate school choice (College of Arts and Sciences, School of Nursing, The Wharton School, or Penn Engineering). Please tell us about specific academic, service, and/or research opportunities at the University of Pennsylvania that resonate with your background, interests, and goals. (400-650 words)
Please help!!!!
<START>
I love a good argument, or more like a good debate. Whenever I went to summer camp we always played fish bowl. We were presented with a topic and two of us debated it out. My list of points would go on and on and I always enjoyed it. Being older, that is still something I love to do. This is why one of my goals is to go to law school. Specifically I want to go into family law.
Becoming a part of the College of Arts and Sciences will help me to achieve this goal. I want to major in PPE. This would allow me to apply my skills to my field of work. With my passion for the things I love I know I will be able to achieve this goal with the help of some of the top professors. I could also further my studies by minoring in one of the PPE fields. I would be working along with Dr.Sen who would help me with any thing PPE related.
Another interest of mine is volunteer work. The rewarding feeling of helping others is something I look forward to. If accepted into Civic House, I would be fulfilling this feeling. I truly believe a small group of people can change the world. Working alongside a diverse, close group of people only adds to that rewarding feeling. I know we would be able to bring about change in the community if apart of this experience. Every year I volunteer at the clothes closet in my city. We give school uniforms to those that need them. It feels good being able to help those who are in need. This keeps me grateful and humble for the things I have.
Volunteer work keeps me appreciative for my life. I thank God for everything I have. Joining the NSP will keep my relationship with God growing. This is another rewarding feeling. I would be spreading the love of God my favorite way-through song. I would love to bring that feeling to other students on and off campus. This would keep me grounded and hopeful for the future while studying at the College.
As a part of the College of Arts and Sciences, I know I could bring about change on the campus and in the community. I am passionate about the things I do and put my all into everything. I believe this is important in living a successful, Godly life. Studying at the University of Pennsylvania will help me to achieve my goals and further my many interests. <END>
jayj
Oct 29, 2014
Undergraduate / "Do what you love"; "what do I love to do though?" -- my family [7]
Thank you so much for the help, I really appreciate it!
Thank you so much for the help, I really appreciate it!
jayj
Oct 29, 2014
Undergraduate / "Do what you love"; "what do I love to do though?" -- my family [7]
My notion of the good life is doing what you love, experiencing new things, and keeping close to God. Going through high school I had a hard time with these things, but soon figured that these were the most important in living a happy, fulfilling life.
Being a quiet person, I never really stepped out of my comfort zone. I always kept to myself. I never really talked much to anyone. My high school years were flying by and I didn't even notice it. My big sister, who is the complete opposite of me, went to the same school as me. She was my voice. When she went off to college I had no choice but to do things on my own though. This would prove to be a tough task: however, I handled it with ease.
When my sister left, I had to make my own friends and start my own conversations. I was shy at first, but then I realized how much better high school was being social. As I began to 'come out of my shell', I became more involved in things and became more school spirited. I began joining clubs and participating in spirit week. It might not seem so big, yet this was a huge step for me. I experienced new things and discovered the things I loved to do. I was finally starting to experience the good life.
Along this journey, I had some of the best experiences with getting involved. I made friendships that could last a lifetime and figured out what I wanted to do with my life through those experiences. I allowed myself to be vulnerable, and nothing but good things came from it. Through all of this, I knew it would not have been possible without God. I understand clearly just how important it is to try new things, and to do the things you love. If you don't, you risk letting your life fly right past you.
Going through my last year of high school has really shown me what the good life is. Along my journey of becoming a new person, I made memories I would never forget. These are the things that really make for the good life. I tried new things, discovered what I loved and did them, and most importantly kept God at the forefront of those activities. I learned to value these things and not take them for granted, for I am truly living the good life.
Being a Gator will help me elaborate on my experiences of living the good life. The University would guide me and teach me the critical skills needed to do what I love in the future. Along this life changing journey, I will be experiencing new things with new people and building a family. Being a part of the gator community and Christian organizations will keep me close to God as I work to help and serve others. This will fulfill and add to my notion of the good life.
Hopefully this is better! I changed what you said I should.
My notion of the good life is doing what you love, experiencing new things, and keeping close to God. Going through high school I had a hard time with these things, but soon figured that these were the most important in living a happy, fulfilling life.
Being a quiet person, I never really stepped out of my comfort zone. I always kept to myself. I never really talked much to anyone. My high school years were flying by and I didn't even notice it. My big sister, who is the complete opposite of me, went to the same school as me. She was my voice. When she went off to college I had no choice but to do things on my own though. This would prove to be a tough task: however, I handled it with ease.
When my sister left, I had to make my own friends and start my own conversations. I was shy at first, but then I realized how much better high school was being social. As I began to 'come out of my shell', I became more involved in things and became more school spirited. I began joining clubs and participating in spirit week. It might not seem so big, yet this was a huge step for me. I experienced new things and discovered the things I loved to do. I was finally starting to experience the good life.
Along this journey, I had some of the best experiences with getting involved. I made friendships that could last a lifetime and figured out what I wanted to do with my life through those experiences. I allowed myself to be vulnerable, and nothing but good things came from it. Through all of this, I knew it would not have been possible without God. I understand clearly just how important it is to try new things, and to do the things you love. If you don't, you risk letting your life fly right past you.
Going through my last year of high school has really shown me what the good life is. Along my journey of becoming a new person, I made memories I would never forget. These are the things that really make for the good life. I tried new things, discovered what I loved and did them, and most importantly kept God at the forefront of those activities. I learned to value these things and not take them for granted, for I am truly living the good life.
Being a Gator will help me elaborate on my experiences of living the good life. The University would guide me and teach me the critical skills needed to do what I love in the future. Along this life changing journey, I will be experiencing new things with new people and building a family. Being a part of the gator community and Christian organizations will keep me close to God as I work to help and serve others. This will fulfill and add to my notion of the good life.
Hopefully this is better! I changed what you said I should.
jayj
Oct 28, 2014
Undergraduate / Essay on swimming - it's part of my life - Babson [8]
Maybe you can explain some of those experiences or give an example.
Maybe you can explain some of those experiences or give an example.
jayj
Oct 28, 2014
Undergraduate / I've always had the desire to learn and to well to others - "good life" [2]
I think you should clear up your notion of the good life. When you talk about others notions it gets a bit confusing. Also, you should look at how UF will help you specifically, not just a general sentence. I posted my first draft the other day and I got really good feedback if you want to go check it out.
I think you should clear up your notion of the good life. When you talk about others notions it gets a bit confusing. Also, you should look at how UF will help you specifically, not just a general sentence. I posted my first draft the other day and I got really good feedback if you want to go check it out.
jayj
Oct 27, 2014
Undergraduate / "Do what you love"; "what do I love to do though?" -- my family [7]
Thank you so much! This really helps me with the direction and getting it started.
Thank you so much! This really helps me with the direction and getting it started.
jayj
Oct 25, 2014
Undergraduate / "Do what you love"; "what do I love to do though?" -- my family [7]
We often hear the phrase "the good life." In fact, the University of Florida's common course required of all undergraduate students is titled "What is the Good Life?". The concept of "the good life" can be interpreted in many different ways depending upon the experiences, values and aspirations of each individual.
In a concise narrative, describe your notion of "the good life." How will your undergraduate experience at the University of Florida prepare you to live "the good life"?
I really need help with the organization and what I should remove, please help!
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"Do what you love."
I cannot even count the number of times I have heard this line. My next question was " what do I love to do though?" Of course they could not answer this for me, but I wanted them to just tell me what I should do with my life and give me the instructions to do it. I knew that wasn't going to happen, but I couldn't help but to want that. I didn't know what I loved to do, but I did know what I loved -- my family.
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We often hear the phrase "the good life." In fact, the University of Florida's common course required of all undergraduate students is titled "What is the Good Life?". The concept of "the good life" can be interpreted in many different ways depending upon the experiences, values and aspirations of each individual.
In a concise narrative, describe your notion of "the good life." How will your undergraduate experience at the University of Florida prepare you to live "the good life"?
I really need help with the organization and what I should remove, please help!
<Start>
"Do what you love."
I cannot even count the number of times I have heard this line. My next question was " what do I love to do though?" Of course they could not answer this for me, but I wanted them to just tell me what I should do with my life and give me the instructions to do it. I knew that wasn't going to happen, but I couldn't help but to want that. I didn't know what I loved to do, but I did know what I loved -- my family.
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