GreatEgo1
Oct 25, 2014
Undergraduate / I am keen to develop essential design skills via Oshman Engineering Design Kitchen - Rice University [7]
Seeking an unconventional and personalized education, I was deeply attracted to the George R. Brown School of Engineering. It feels as though you cut off the rest of your thought. Try adding a second sentence here for transitional purposes.
With the comprehensive course series the University provides, which equip me with various analytic techniques and academic supports, I am keen to develop essential design skills via the Oshman Engineering Design Kitchen(OEDK). The fusion of creating projects into engineering curriculum will further broaden my ability to deploy solutions to real-world engineering challenges; not to mention the FabShops held by OEDK could maximize my potential to turn ideas into physical realities. Great points! It's good you're talking about how the school's actual programs could help you and it shows a knowledge about the University.
Moreover word choice? Moreover seems out of place. Typically it doesn't begin a paragraph so it seems odd (though not incorrect) , I would like to well- groom myself in other important fields such as global perspective and leadership in the Rice Center of Engineering Leadership(RCEL). Having an internship experience in my junior year, I am eager to grab a more challenging and prestigious internship opportunity in RECL.
With its many programs and opportunities available , the George R. Brown School of Engineering is definitely the ideal place that will empower me to thrive as an engineer and lead at the front-line of making a difference for the world.
Seeking an unconventional and personalized education, I was deeply attracted to the George R. Brown School of Engineering. It feels as though you cut off the rest of your thought. Try adding a second sentence here for transitional purposes.
With the comprehensive course series the University provides, which equip me with various analytic techniques and academic supports, I am keen to develop essential design skills via the Oshman Engineering Design Kitchen(OEDK). The fusion of creating projects into engineering curriculum will further broaden my ability to deploy solutions to real-world engineering challenges; not to mention the FabShops held by OEDK could maximize my potential to turn ideas into physical realities. Great points! It's good you're talking about how the school's actual programs could help you and it shows a knowledge about the University.
Moreover word choice? Moreover seems out of place. Typically it doesn't begin a paragraph so it seems odd (though not incorrect) , I would like to well- groom myself in other important fields such as global perspective and leadership in the Rice Center of Engineering Leadership(RCEL). Having an internship experience in my junior year, I am eager to grab a more challenging and prestigious internship opportunity in RECL.
With its many programs and opportunities available , the George R. Brown School of Engineering is definitely the ideal place that will empower me to thrive as an engineer and lead at the front-line of making a difference for the world.
