Undergraduate / "What would you do if you knew you couldn't fail"? Common App Questions for VCU [6]

I only have one out of two done and I desperately need help editing this one.

Prompt:Describe a challenging situation you've faced. Briefly state the situation, how you responded and why, would you have done anything differently, has it affected or shaped who you are today?

Answer:
The first two years of my high school career consisted of my academic anxieties. I was one of the very few colored students in my class. I felt as if I did not belong. Too afraid to ask for help, too afraid to even speak; I poorly executed half my high school life. The summer before junior year someone close to me said that I would not get into college. I felt defeated. Yet, this was the shock that brought me to change.

The start of junior year I became engaged and confident in myself. I asked for help when needed and I studied harder. For the first time I felt the drive for success. I wanted to be the example student others looked up to: even if it was different than the majority. From my new energy, a few others who were also unconfident thanked me, and gained the assurance to succeed.

Beginning of senior year I was asked the question: "What would you do if you knew you couldn't fail"? The answer I gave myself - to forever be confident. As a result, I am securely able to balance school, volunteering, work-study, choir performances, and a part-time job. The only difference I wish I could done made is to start out confident and believe in myself so I could have succeeded early in high school. Although, from my change not only do I build upon myself, I inspire my peers to be proud of whom they are.

I know it's a really rough first draft.