HelenKom
Dec 26, 2014
Undergraduate / Gender Inequality: A complex problem/ Princeton Supplement [8]
Great essay! I agree with most of its points. However, it doesn't look like you've answered the question. The prompt asks you to describe someone or something that changed you and your approach to life. So in this essay, you should probably talk about how seeing yourself and other people suffer from the injustice of gender inequality made you a feminist (?). Instead, you talk about the general definition of inequality, the examples of it, and your vision of solving this problem. Make it more about yourself and your own views! Maybe also mention your attitude towards inequality BEFORE realizing its importance, so that the admission officers can really track the transition you made. Tell us more about what exactly influenced you, and how you today are different from the you that didn't think about gender inequality.
Great essay! I agree with most of its points. However, it doesn't look like you've answered the question. The prompt asks you to describe someone or something that changed you and your approach to life. So in this essay, you should probably talk about how seeing yourself and other people suffer from the injustice of gender inequality made you a feminist (?). Instead, you talk about the general definition of inequality, the examples of it, and your vision of solving this problem. Make it more about yourself and your own views! Maybe also mention your attitude towards inequality BEFORE realizing its importance, so that the admission officers can really track the transition you made. Tell us more about what exactly influenced you, and how you today are different from the you that didn't think about gender inequality.
