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veronica1

Jan 2, 2015

Undergraduate / The life of a middle class family is like a roller coaster - my 1st essay for transfer application. [5]

Thanks for your suggestions on my essay.
I agree on the previous comment. This is the question of University of Michigan, right? I have applied it for early action and I think the most important point of this essay is your place within the community. What have you done and what do you plan to do?

What quality do you want to show to the university? You can write something in your activities list, like a club or a foundation which you serve as a leader to show AO your strong leadership or just to have details to elaborate. The middle class community is also a good one which can show your consideration for others once you focus on yourself and your role.

Hope my little piece of advice can help you. Thx again and good luck(:

veronica1

Jan 2, 2015

Undergraduate / Stanford roommate Essay-With me, you will never enter the wrong room [2]

Dear Roomie,

This is WY! I'm excited to spend the next year with you (and hopefully three more after that!)

With me, you will never enter the wrong room because our dorm will always be the one with appetizing smell. Yang-style Chinese dishes will definitely surprise you: dumplings with creative stuffing and various dim sums! Music is also my love and I may practice the harmonica or sing involuntarily. Feel comfortable joining in or letting me know when to cut it out. As for my hobbies, reading is my favorite pastime. If I'm not in dorm, the most possible place is the library. To relax, apart from tennis and swimming, I often do Tai Chi. I can teach you if you are also interested.

I am humorous and pretty good at telling jokes. I am always curious about new knowledge, people and culture. Besides, a neat freak is greeting you. Let's work together to make our dorm comfortable for living and studying!

I am a good listener and advisor. So feel free to chat with me. I will try my best to help when you need me. I myself really enjoy friends sitting together and sharing something. If you like, we can discuss our academic puzzles, read books or talk about dreams and crazy ideas, while enjoying my hand-made snacks. Hope we will become friends that can count on each other and make progress together.

I can't wait to know more about you and explore Stanford with you!

Sincerely,
WY
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Thanks for reading and really appreciate all the suggestions.
I think I talk about too much things but they are all me and I don't know to cut which part off.
Again, Thanks very much!