Posts by castor

castor

Jan 2, 2015

Undergraduate / I'm from southern suburbia bless your heart's and country music blasting from the muddy pickup truck [3]

the beginning is very strong but as you get down to the middle it gets slightly cliché right around the box holding. I know box holding in itself it cliché but i mean more the topic itself. All you've done is bring up the same points every other feminist has. The idea of the dance and the 5 B's is great, and the last line is a great ending, however, i feel you let your emotions get the best of you and you seem slightly annoyingly angry. dont take it the wrong way, i agree with you completely, and i wrote an essay for university a few months ago and my mom said the same thing. I sound too angry. Try getting the points across without blaming the entire male population. take a fair standpoint between males and females and don't be biased towards one gender.

Very well written though. Revise the middle

castor

Jan 2, 2015

Writing Feedback / Why do you do what you do? The point of reading is something every already reader knows [3]

1. Why do you do what you do?

First of all, to escape. Something all dedicated readers have in common is this driving force of their somewhat addictive pass time. I feel that the power behind a novel, and the ability to get lost in the words of an author, is something only a reader can understand. To devote yourself to a story that isn't yours, to read the thoughts of another person, and to render your mind to the pages of a book is the truest form of nirvana that I have ever felt. No matter how nice your life is, it is always nice to inhabit another one for a while.

Secondly, if you have a beating heart, pulsating blood, and a wandering mind, then you have felt the overwhelming feeling of wanderlust. After traveling through space in the dystopian world of "Ender's Game" by Orson Scott Card and traveling back to Kabul, Afghanistan, during 1963, in "The Kite Runner" by Khaled Hosseini, I can honestly say that my need to travel has been momentarily satisfied. I was able to defy space limitations and understand a world I was born after and a world I will not be alive to see.

Thirdly, I learned how to analyze and compare. Both of these books take place in the minds of two, very different, introverted boys who both experience things far beyond the capacities of their six-year old minds. After reading these books one after the other, I discovered how to connect and compare the minds of two boys living hundreds of years apart. I learned how to analyze novels, ideas, the past, and the future. These skills are key elements that will help me question and explore things for the rest of my life.

Fourthly, a little common sense never hurt anybody. If you've ever had a conversation with somebody who's read an array of books, you will understand when I tell you: They are smart, inquisitive and thirsty for knowledge. Reading, whether fiction, non-fiction or sci-fi, opens up so many doors when it comes to conversations. It helps you contribute during discussions, gain and share knowledge, and expand your vocabulary. A reader is a person whose mind has being given the chance to come alive. Where's the downside?