sumdysan
Jan 17, 2015
Writing Feedback / "Motivation will almost always beat mere talent." [3]
Hi, I think you need to give more specific examples. As the essay question details: "reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations" You could give examples of certain skills that can only be learned/perfected through motivation, such as ballet dancing or playing the guitar. Even though a certain amount of talent is needed in gracefulness and having some sensitivity to pitch and tone etc. mastering these skills requires hours and hours of practice.
You should also address the challenging viewpoint - as the essay is quite harsh in saying that motivation will ALWAYS beat talent. There are some ways in which talent is more important than motivation, perhaps at the start? or for certain steps of achieving success? You have to consider this.
Hi, I think you need to give more specific examples. As the essay question details: "reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations" You could give examples of certain skills that can only be learned/perfected through motivation, such as ballet dancing or playing the guitar. Even though a certain amount of talent is needed in gracefulness and having some sensitivity to pitch and tone etc. mastering these skills requires hours and hours of practice.
You should also address the challenging viewpoint - as the essay is quite harsh in saying that motivation will ALWAYS beat talent. There are some ways in which talent is more important than motivation, perhaps at the start? or for certain steps of achieving success? You have to consider this.