Writing Feedback / Evaluation of sample introductions for some essay questions. [4]

Task 2

Question

In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

Introduction

People have different views about their place. Some people think that they preferred to stay in one location for the rest of their life. Nowadays, many people who live in the differences area are more satisfaction. I strongly believe that staying in some places has many benefits for their life experience they have easier to gain a lot of information.

Question

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.
How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it?

Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

Introduction

Some people believe that watching movie and television programs more effective to improve their knowledge about every country around the world. While others argued that statement and they said that being a visitor is one of the best ways to know all the customs immediately which is used by different countries. It is true that the journey to other regions gives us the real learning about anything.

Question

Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different for those around them. Others say that they add variety and interest.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Introduction

People have different views about the buildings. Some people think that new innovation buildings are poor in quality and defacement which seems different with old buildings. While others believe that modern building is prettier and comfortable than original building. I honestly agree that fashionable buildings which is designed are worldwide.

Writing Feedback / Learning a new language at any age is an anormously rewarding experience in many ways [2]

All children should study a foreign language, starting in the earliest grades. To what extent do you agree or disagree to this statement ?

Language is one of communication tool which has all of countries around the world. Some people say that students must study other languages in primary school. I strongly believe that learning many languages is very important for children.

Learning a new language at any age is an anormously rewarding experience in many ways. While language learning is an enriching experience for all ages, children have the most to gain from this wonderful adventure. Quite simply, starting early offers the widest possible set of benefits an opportunity. Studying foreign language gives more advantages for children. Firstly, children understand intuitively that language is something to explore, to play around with and to enjoy. The quickness with which they pick up their first language is nearly and such a joy to watch as a parent. Secondly, students have better and more advanced reading skill.

In addition, a study undertaken by York University in Canada suggests that bilingual children's knowledge of a second language gives them an advantage in learning to read. Their ability to apply the insights and experiences of one language to the other as well as their wider experience of language gives them a big leg up, and children are always discovering new things.

However, learning foreign language has negative effect for students who are studying in primary schools. For instance, students have target to learn many lessons which are given by teacher in their schools as main subject which must be focussed by every student, so students are very difficult to learn other languages because learning language needs a long time to understand by children and they cannot manage their time to focus other courses. Therefore, children should only study primary subjects in their schools.

To sum up, it seems to me that the government and multiple stakeholders should use curriculums including new language to primary schools, and students will be easier to learn second language. Parents also should give support for their children to improve new knowledge.