Graduate / 'Since my early days as a child I was fond of exploring how things work' - Applying for Master Study [7]

I'm applying for a master and this is my statement of purpose
I want to have your honest feedback about it from these aspects
1) quality of language and structure
2) coherence of ideas
3) meeting the SOP writing standards or not
4) overall opinion
your help would be greatly appreciated
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Dear sir
Since my early days as a child I was fond of exploring how things work. I was that kid who disassembles or smashes every toy he has to know how it works. I have developed a rather intuitive and profound fascination in exploring the electronic gadgets, especially with regard to their construction and operation. This fascination for everything electronic prompted me to take up Mathematics, Physics and Chemistry as my course of study in my higher secondary school. I received high grades with distinction as I finished among the top 5% in my school. This made me able to fulfill my dream with securing an admission to faculty of engineering at XXX University, one of the top universities in XXX.

After I started studying at faculty of engineering, I decided to choose electronics and telecommunications as my specialization to feed my passion. During my five years of studying, I have learned that engineering is as much as an art as it is a science. My study reinforced me with solid understanding of the basic concepts of communication theories, power electronics, signal processing, electromagnetic waves and networking. I have consistently performed well and maintained high grades throughout my curriculum. Furthermore, I graduated my Bachelor course with a First class with distinction and was among the top 10% in my batch. I gained the 13th rank amongst 178 students. Even my college awarded me with a cash prize in all the four years, for maintaining high grades.

In my graduation thesis, I was working on a research project to establish a low cost, robust, wireless Ad Hoc network between the moving vehicles, without the need of enterprise infrastructure. We researched the different network architectures that can be used. My responsibility was choosing the best RF link to be suitable to handle the high mobility challenges of the moving cars environment such as the Doppler effect that shifts the carrier frequency and very short connection time. My work included modifying the Wi-Fi protocol to operate similar to the DSRC (Dedicated Short Range Communication) protocol (which was made for high mobility applications). However, there were no adapters available to run DSRC protocol, so I chose a wireless adapter to assist me in my project. Since I was not familiar with the C programming language the adapter used, I learned and became proficient in the C programming language to assist with the project.

For the past 2 months, I joined XXX, one of the leading research institutes in XXX, as a researcher. I continued my contribution to the ITS (Intelligent Transportation System) by working on a project to reduce the road accidents in XXX, using sensor networks and smart phones. Our goal was to assist the car driver and warn him from different road obstacles (speed bumps, road holes, U-turns and so on) that can cause accidents, by building a database for obstacles and make the drivers access it through communication technologies.

My aim to develop myself more and help people to have a good quality of life made me to be actively involved in extracurricular activities beside academic studies. I was an active member in the IEEE student's branch in my university for about one year. I organized a lot of scientific events, symposiums and trips with the aim of spreading science passion. In addition, I was a member in AIESEC, and travelled to India to participate in a volunteering project to spread cancer awareness. I can say that Travelling abroad enriched me and gave me the privilege of being opened to different cultures. I learned that we, as humans, have more in common than our differences.

The thirst for exploring of this kid is not satisfied yet. And education is a lifelong process, that's why I want to continue my study by pursuing a master degree in Germany. Germany is renowned for a long tradition of welcoming international students and its higher education is one of the best in the world, especially in the fields of engineering and science. And I can benefit from having such a world class degree to establish my career as a communication engineer and a researcher. Furthermore, I will have the opportunity to learn German, which will open many doors for me.

I chose the master program of communication engineering at XXX, after I read carefully the curriculum and found that it fully suits my ambitions. Moreover,XXX is one of the leading universities in Germany with a long tradition of scientific partnership and cooperation with industry. It will give me an international exposure and insights into new trends, which will help me to push my studies and research forward.

I am looking forward to continue my contribution to the ITS by researching to develop its various applications, and I do believe that the program will provide me with what I need to start.

With my strong academic background, intellectual abilities and practical experience, I am confident that I will bring a high level energy, enthusiasm and cultural diversity to this program and exceed your expectations.

I am grateful for considering my application and I look forward for your favorable reply.

Sincerely,

Graduate / SOP for studying master in telecommunication and electronics in Germany [2]

hi there
I'm applying for a master degree in germany, and I want some help in my statement of purpose
I want to check the quality of language structure and the correlation between ideas

please feel free to advice me with anything that you find irrelevant, and provide me with a global opinion about my letter
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Dear Dr XXX

I am writing this letter to show my motivation to join the master program of "XXX" at XXX. I do believe that my educational background and deep concern of this field of study, makes me a good candidate for this program.

I have received my bachelor's degree in electronics and communications engineering from XXX University in XXX. I graduated with honors, as I have never failed any subject during my study. Also, I ranked 13th amongst my group of students (178 student). My study gave me a solid background in several relevant subjects such as communications theory, electromagnetic waves, antenna and wave propagation and digital signal processing. These courses gave me comprehensive understanding of modulation and its types, RF transmission lines, waveguides, antennas and networking layers and protocols . In addition, I studied the fundamental mathematics subjects such as calculus, linear algebra, probability and applied statistics, which are, also, the core of electromagnetic and telecommunications science. I have received high grades in these subjects.

In my graduation thesis, I was working on a critical project that belongs to future, which is establishing a low cost, robust, wireless Ad Hoc network between the moving vehicles, without the need of enterprise infrastructure. My sub-team was working on choosing the best RF link to be suitable to handle the high mobility challenges of the moving cars environment such as the Doppler effect that shift the carrier frequency and very short connection time. This made me able to experience the challenges that face modern telecommunication systems. My work also included modifying the Wifi protocol (IEEE 802.11) to operate like another protocol called DSRC (Dedicated Short Range communications) that was designed specifically for the automotive use, as we couldn't buy the adapters that run this protocol. I became proficient in C language programming, as the wireless driver of the adapter we bought was written in C.

After graduation, I realized that I want to continue my education. I found that I want to specialize in the development of telecommunications systems.

Besides the college academics I was actively involved in the extra-curricular activities. The driving force behind all of this was my aim to develop myself more and help people to have a good quality of life. I was an active member in the IEEE student's branch in my university for about one year. I organized a lot of events and trips with the aim of spreading science passion, and to provide young creative people with the proper environment to innovate.

In addition, I was a member in AIESEC, which is an international organization, which provides young people with cross-cultural volunteering internships to develop themselves and impact their societies. I travelled to India to participate in a volunteering project related to cancer awareness. I conducted a lot of presentations and fund-raising events to spread cancer awareness among Indians. Also, I participated in governmental campaigns made for raising the health level of people. This made me opened to different cultures and gave me good experience in the social work.

I am also an amateur football player, I was playing in my school team for more than 5 years and I participated in a lot of tournaments and events, and played for my faculty team for some period. Moreover, I am a photography and cinema enthusiast, I am engaged in a cinema club in my city called PARADISO, that spread cinema culture among the people here, and bring them good movies from all-over the world to watch and discuss.

In general, I am an easy-going person who can tolerate others, no matter what kind of thinking they have. In addition, I am a fast learner who can learn in a relatively short time.

I want to study in Germany as German higher education is one of the best in the world! I can benefit from Germany's long and famous university tradition especially in the fields of engineering and science.

Also, German university degree is highly respected by employers around the world. And the cost of living is reasonable, compared to other European countries, and the education is almost free. It will be a good chance to study in a country that has produced a long list of revolutionary inventions such as the automobile, the airbag, X-ray technology, Aspirin and the MP3 data compression format.

Moreover, Germany means living in the middle of Europe surrounded by many other countries. I will have a wide range of destinations near me. I can experience an entirely different culture and language, within a couple of hours by train or plane. I can go for weekend's trips in relatively reasonable costs.

Furthermore, I will have the opportunity to learn German language, which will open many doors for me, as German is one of the ten most spoken languages in the world, this means better opportunities.

I want to study in XXXTU, because of its good reputation in the field of technical studies in general and communications engineering in particular. I found that the master program of communications and signal processing has a great reputation for its scientific research standards. This means that during my studies I can benefit from this international exposure to push my studies and research forward.

On the other hand, XXX city has great variety of nature and green areas, this will help me to maintain a good mood for studying and be creative. I would like to try skiing in the winter as well. I think it provides a good atmosphere for studying.

I strongly believe that the master program in XXX will provide me with the suitable knowledge and background that can qualify me to pursue a professional career in the field of designing and developing more sophisticated telecommunications systems.

My future research topic is the developing of communication technologies for the ITS (intelligent transport system), and I believe that the program will provide me with what I need to start.

In the end, I am grateful for considering my application and I look forward for your favorable reply.

Sincerely,

samir

Writing Feedback / Essay about investment on art and culture - IELTS task 2 [5]

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.

To what extent do you agree with this statement?
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In this era we live nowadays, there are several duties the governments should have. One of these duties is taking care of culture of the country, which is really a serious matter. However, some people believe that the governments should reduce the amount of money spent on cultural and artistic activities, including music, theaters, opera houses and so on.

People who claim that we shouldn't spend these huge amounts of money on arts, believe that there are more important issues to take care of. For instance, they say that we should care more for improving health services by building new hospitals and raising the efficiency of the existing ones. Also, improving the means of transportations considered as one of the critical things, that the governments should invest more money in. they have to build more roads and more railways. Also, improve the roads to decrease the number of car accidents. Make the public transportations more efficient, to reduce the dependence on the cars as the main mean of transport. These were examples of services that people want more improvements in .

nobody can say that those people are not right, but not thoroughly right . despite the importance of these services that make our life much more easier and comfortable, the arts and cultures are important as well. Life can't continue without it. Art add a meaning to our lives and help us to overcome our problems and the everyday routines, which somehow kills our souls. Also, it's one of the main means of building an identity for any country. We can see nowadays, how big countries that have no history, invest a lot of money on movies and music, just to be proud of it. Therefore, arts cannot be neglected by any mean.

in conclusion, we can't live in this life without art. Art is the nutrition for the soul, as food is for the body. To have a better life, we have to invest in the both aspects