EF_Christopher
Feb 26, 2015
Writing Feedback / People perceive change in different ways. Is it always for the better or not? Is vital for our lives [4]
"From the mental perspective, changes relating to traveling and receiving education help one broaden one's mind and learn something new"
Good writing in your way to show both sides of the argument that you are presenting. But with this one sentence try rewording it so that the thought can flow more smoothly.
"From the mental perspective, changes relating to traveling and receiving education help one broaden one's mind and learn something new"
Good writing in your way to show both sides of the argument that you are presenting. But with this one sentence try rewording it so that the thought can flow more smoothly.