Kifti H Islami
Mar 6, 2015
Writing Feedback / In general, Social Sciences, Arts leads highly of the main fields of study than the other subjects. [4]
Please, correct my writing IELTS Task 1 Practice :)
The two pie charts compare and contrast data on the different seven study fields of post-school qualifications of two age categories; under 40 (25 to 34) and over 50 (55 to 69) in Australia.
In general, Social Sciences, Arts leads highly of the main fields of study than the other subjects.
More specifically, Social Sciences, Arts is the highest choice in both of two ages with a figure of 19,48% (age between 25 to 34) and 20,42% (age between 55 to 69). These contrast markedly in Architecture with 1,85% (age between 25 and 34) and in Veterinary,Agriculture at 2,0% (age between 55-69). However Veterinary,Agriculture is the lowest post-school choice in age over 50. Another side of levelable Australian's degree addressed Engineering course has over 2-fold percentage; 9,36% (from 357,500 Australians) and with 19,27% (from 104.800 Australians). Clearly result of two pie charts of the seven main fields of study social Sciences, Art become a popular post-school qualifications for more than 460.000 Australians.
Please, correct my writing IELTS Task 1 Practice :)
The two pie charts compare and contrast data on the different seven study fields of post-school qualifications of two age categories; under 40 (25 to 34) and over 50 (55 to 69) in Australia.
In general, Social Sciences, Arts leads highly of the main fields of study than the other subjects.
More specifically, Social Sciences, Arts is the highest choice in both of two ages with a figure of 19,48% (age between 25 to 34) and 20,42% (age between 55 to 69). These contrast markedly in Architecture with 1,85% (age between 25 and 34) and in Veterinary,Agriculture at 2,0% (age between 55-69). However Veterinary,Agriculture is the lowest post-school choice in age over 50. Another side of levelable Australian's degree addressed Engineering course has over 2-fold percentage; 9,36% (from 357,500 Australians) and with 19,27% (from 104.800 Australians). Clearly result of two pie charts of the seven main fields of study social Sciences, Art become a popular post-school qualifications for more than 460.000 Australians.
