Undergraduate / An Experience that has been particularly meaningful to me is when I gave birth to my son. FAMU Essay [3]

1. Describe an activity, interest, experience, or achievement in your life (this could be a book, movie or an activity or experience at work, home or school) that has been particularly meaningful to you.

And This Is What I Have So Far:

An Experience that has been particularly meaningful to me is when I gave birth to my son. Having him in my life completely changed me. A year ago i would have never thought i would be a mother, but this experience has been a blessing and it has given me the motivation to do my best at everthing in my life. I want to attend FAMU because i am determined to complete school and follow my dreams. i want to be an example for my son and show him that no matter what life throws at you, that you should still finish what you started. Getting An Education is important to me and my son makes me want it even more.

(i still need to edit it as far as grammar goes)