nedymin
Apr 24, 2015
Writing Feedback / A government has various duties to its citizens, but limited resources. Should defence spending take [5]
thanks a lot for your advice, Amir1987
I have just got an edited essay from my teacher.
So I hope it can help a little for beginner like me.
Nowadays, people still have many different problems and needs, thus they need the supports from their governments. Defense spending in many countriesdoes not seem to stop increasing. In my opinion, high defense spending is not a good way to use the national budget.
It has been argued thatusing a lot of money in defenses makes the citizens become poorer. Peoplehave to work very hard but they arenot paid well because the budget from the government to pay people is not sufficient. For example, themilitary development in North Korea isinversely proportional tothe life qualities of the citizens. Many people in this country are still underfed but the government does not use part of the militarybudget to help them out.
In addition, I also agree with another point of view that different improvements in the defense lead to competition. The arms race among different countries makes life even harder for the citizens. For instance, the competition of militaries and economics between America and Russia worsens the relationships between them. Economic sanctions to Russia from America is a huge lostfor Russia its people.
It is undeniable that a few countries are stronger and richer by military, such as America or China. However, the prosperousness of thenation and the happiness of the people are more important. I favor the idea that governments should cut down their spending in defense and increase their spending in improving people's lives.
thanks a lot for your advice, Amir1987
I have just got an edited essay from my teacher.
So I hope it can help a little for beginner like me.
Nowadays, people still have many different problems and needs, thus they need the supports from their governments. Defense spending in many countriesdoes not seem to stop increasing. In my opinion, high defense spending is not a good way to use the national budget.
It has been argued thatusing a lot of money in defenses makes the citizens become poorer. Peoplehave to work very hard but they arenot paid well because the budget from the government to pay people is not sufficient. For example, themilitary development in North Korea isinversely proportional tothe life qualities of the citizens. Many people in this country are still underfed but the government does not use part of the militarybudget to help them out.
In addition, I also agree with another point of view that different improvements in the defense lead to competition. The arms race among different countries makes life even harder for the citizens. For instance, the competition of militaries and economics between America and Russia worsens the relationships between them. Economic sanctions to Russia from America is a huge lostfor Russia its people.
It is undeniable that a few countries are stronger and richer by military, such as America or China. However, the prosperousness of thenation and the happiness of the people are more important. I favor the idea that governments should cut down their spending in defense and increase their spending in improving people's lives.
