Graduate / Personal statement for Masters degree in Chemical Engineering help [5]

It's not bad at all, but a little bit dull. This essay is supposed to show individuality and give the admissions a good reason to pick you. Make it flow a little better and read more like a narrative.

However, it does sound like you did well, you just don't need to make a list of everything that you accomplished. Try to make it more descriptive.

Undergraduate / 'history and international situations' - UT essay: important issue [9]

Remember to indent your paragraphs.
"Everyone here had different standpoints, and there seemed no right or wrong"

Should be, "and there seemed to BE no right or wrong."

Also, try to not start a sentence with the word "and"

But it's not bad! Just keep rewriting it until your totally satisfied.