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Chamsky

Jul 29, 2015

Writing Feedback / Prepare for the effects of global climate change [3]

Hi! greenw4y2

Here you have some corrections for you essay:

1: If this solution was applied successfully, we would reduce a great amount of smog released from cars and motorbikes everyday.
If this solution were applied successfully, we would reduce a great amount of smog released from cars and motorbikes everyday.

2: This measure will contribute to slow down the greenhouse effect which is one of the notable issues of the environment.(between effect and which should be a comma)

This measure will contribute to slow down the greenhouse effect, which is one of the notable issues of the environment.

Chamsky

Jul 10, 2015

Graduate / Similarities and differences between me and my cousin [2]

Hi! @mina_banano

Here are my suggestion for you paragraph
1: I remember when I and my cousin were child.
Correction: I remember when my cousin and I were children.

2: I would write a period to start the second sentence in the first paragraph

3: Everyone who has seen we for first time, they think we are sister
Correction: Everyone who has seen us thinks we are sister

4: I would write a period before however.

5: I think you should organize you Ideas, and write the similarities in only one paragraph and the differences in the other.

6: Considering the appearance of us, although both of us like to play with boys.

7: Considering the appearance of us, although both of us like to play with boys, unlike her, I like to cut my hairs on boys' style. I am very much been in my privacy; in contrast, she loves parties and social activities. Furthermore, I watched much more movies than she did.

Correction: First, we are not physically alike. Unlike her, I like to cut my hair like a boy. I enjoy being alone while, she loves parties and social activities. Furthermore, I have watched much more movies than she has.

8: I like my cousin a lot and hope to be health and happy forever.
Correction: I like my cousin a lot and hope to be healthy and happy forever.

Chamsky

Jun 23, 2015

Writing Feedback / "My Terrible Neighborhood" - Stating reasons and giving examples paragraph. [4]

Thank you justivy03 and lcturn87 for your meaningful feedback. I truly appreciate it.

Chamsky

Jun 23, 2015

Writing Feedback / "My Terrible Neighborhood" - Stating reasons and giving examples paragraph. [4]

Name: ???
June 23, 2015
Writing 5

My Terrible Neighborhood

My neighborhood is the worst place to live, so I have to another one because I cannot afford its rooms;

it is very perilous, and the people is extremely noisy. First, the rooms are very expensive. For instance, I

pay 200 dollars for the room monthly. My friends pay around 220 bucks monthly for their rooms. For

example, Pablo pays 240 dollars monthly for his room even more expensive than my friends' rooms. The

second reason is that my neighborhood is dangerous. Thieves brake into the houses very often. For

instance, they broke into three houses last week. Gangs have killed many people there. There are many

security guards in my neighborhood, although they cannot do anything because gangster threaten them.

As a result, the gangster do what they want. Finally, the neighbors are very noisy. They throw parties

very often. For example, they threw six parties last month. They yell extremely loud every night. In fact,

you can hear them if you are standing to blocks away. In brief, my neighborhood is the most horrible

place to live because of its high price rooms, dominated by thieves area, and inconsiderate and

uneducated people.