TheSheep
Aug 22, 2015
Undergraduate / All of my goals derive from my passion for problem solving and helping others. College Application [4]
Since the prompt says to talk about your goals I think it would be better to talk less about AP courses focus more on how everything relates to your passion in the study of human behavior. You also mention that you learned leadership skills and communication skills. Elaborate on how that affects your skills in psychology.
Another things I would say to delete the "helping others" part of the first paragraph because you barely mention it in the whole essay. Also it is a extremely cliche thing that I wouldn't recommend.
Since the prompt says to talk about your goals I think it would be better to talk less about AP courses focus more on how everything relates to your passion in the study of human behavior. You also mention that you learned leadership skills and communication skills. Elaborate on how that affects your skills in psychology.
Another things I would say to delete the "helping others" part of the first paragraph because you barely mention it in the whole essay. Also it is a extremely cliche thing that I wouldn't recommend.