Posts by joao

joao_carlos

Aug 26, 2015

Writing Feedback / Toefl Essays; Students can get some specific jobs only if they study science and mathematics [2]

more imporatan t for several reasons.

more important for several reasons

One of the most important reasons is that

Students can get a job of doctor, engineer, nurse, scientist, mathematician and researcher only if they study science and mathematics. ~~They can get job easily in this field~~

In my opinion/ I am sure that , students can easily get jobs, like medicine , engineering , nursing , scientist, math teacher and researcher ~~only~~ if they study science and mathematics

For example, when I was in the university in the Newyork, some of my friends had choosen to study history and literature

For example, when I was in the university in the Newyork, some of my friends had chosen to study history and literature

When they graduated they tried to search for the jobs but they found that demand of history researchers and literarure professors is very few

Finally , when they graduated they did not find job because the demand of history researchers and literarure professors is very few

I noted so other speeling problem and lack of transitions words, please pay attention with that.

joao_carlos

Aug 19, 2015

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Internet provides a lot of information and it is positive [4]

Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

I believe that internet provides a lot of information and it is positive. In my opinion internet makes easier to people know about a lot of thing faster and in the most cases for free. On the other hand, getting information on internet sometimes cannot be 100% accurate.

First, before internet was invented people search information on books. To clarify, books are a very good way to get information but it takes more time to get ones questions solved. Differ from the internet, which has some famous websites, such as, Google and Yahoo, where we can find an answer for almost everything. For example, my father studied medicine thirty years ago and at this time internet had not been invented. So, he studied with books, and he says he had read hundreds of books during his college to get his doubts clarified. He says that after internet was invented to study medicine or other subjects were much easier because it is easier to find information on internet than in books. This example clearly shows that internet make search easier and cheaper.

Second, at the same time that this famous websites make search easier, one cannot trust 100% on it. In other words, anyone can post everything and in some cases the information is not correct. For instance, another famous websites is called "wikepedia", the information which is posted on this website is provided by normal people while the information on books is provided by specialized authors. So, everybody need to take care when they search things online for papers and homeworks. In addition, everybody need to be in mind that when we search on internet we need to know who is the author of the information.

To conclude, internet is there to help students to get information fast and for free. However, we need to take care with the origin of this information, because sometimes it can be wrong or not 100% correct.

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