Undergraduate / Attitude Change: when opportunities arise, don't wait until it's too late - ED Princeton Pers. Essay [8]

Hello Ria, you've written a whole essay on how well accomplished you are and how everything has come easy for you. But, you don't really talk about how you've used this to maybe help people around you of how you've used your privileges. Furthermore, maybe you could elaborate on an example on how you used your skills to better the world around you. By doing this, I believe your essay would be stronger!

Undergraduate / Full Sail Ahead - venturing into auspicious tomorrows. Personal essay on interest. [4]

As someone from Taiwan I believe your essay is very well written.

Some grammar/punctuation errors:

I realize I've become an indiscernible, tangled medley of customs; my concept of home suspended above a sea of uncertainty.
I had struggled in my search for home, had drowned in waves that beat against the barriers of icy unfamiliarity, but instead of suffocating, I stretched my arms further.

But most of all, they became the reason I always venture confidently into oscillating, auspicious tomorrows, with full speed ahead.

Letters / Requesting a recommendation letter to professor to transfer to university [2]

You should probably include what you want to study so that the professor can have a better idea of what he should say.