djl5252
Jul 20, 2009
Undergraduate / I will forever be nostalgic for the summer of 09 - PENN STATE essay [4]
Hi everyone, before we start id like to thank anyone who helps me out. i appreciate it very much. im so nervous about turning this in.
This is what i have, its 23 chars over the limit so i need to shorten it.
the personal statement is for penn state, they ask
Please choose one of your activities or another experience you would like to share and provide a short description of its importance to you. Include why that commitment could be relevant to your student experience at Penn State.
I will forever be nostalgic for the summer of 09. On may 25th my highschool sweetheart and longtime girlfriend of 2 years gave birth to our daughter. It was an experience that has affected me profoundly.
The birth of my daughter has taught me many things. First of all it has shown me what my highest priorities are. The highest priority for me is to be able to take care of my family. I believe that through determination and hard work i can achieve this but an education is a must if I plan to succeed. As a high school dropout i was taught this the hard way, but because of that a thirst and hunger for academics has been ingrained into me.
Secondly, my daughter has instilled discipline in me. Having one person dependant on you for survival is a demanding job. It has also taught me to be a more selfless person and to have compassions for others. Lastly, it has taught me that I want to better myself so i can be a role model to my daughter, or anything else whose situation was like mine.
I believe these qualities make me an ideal penn state student, and I am sure that penn state is the right college for me to attend. Ive always rooted for the Nittany Lions, and I can picture myself studying on campus now.
if you guys could just help me out, i need to delete 23 chars, probably some errors in there, and my grammar isnt the best, so id like some help with that.
thanks alot!
Hi everyone, before we start id like to thank anyone who helps me out. i appreciate it very much. im so nervous about turning this in.
This is what i have, its 23 chars over the limit so i need to shorten it.
the personal statement is for penn state, they ask
Please choose one of your activities or another experience you would like to share and provide a short description of its importance to you. Include why that commitment could be relevant to your student experience at Penn State.
I will forever be nostalgic for the summer of 09. On may 25th my highschool sweetheart and longtime girlfriend of 2 years gave birth to our daughter. It was an experience that has affected me profoundly.
The birth of my daughter has taught me many things. First of all it has shown me what my highest priorities are. The highest priority for me is to be able to take care of my family. I believe that through determination and hard work i can achieve this but an education is a must if I plan to succeed. As a high school dropout i was taught this the hard way, but because of that a thirst and hunger for academics has been ingrained into me.
Secondly, my daughter has instilled discipline in me. Having one person dependant on you for survival is a demanding job. It has also taught me to be a more selfless person and to have compassions for others. Lastly, it has taught me that I want to better myself so i can be a role model to my daughter, or anything else whose situation was like mine.
I believe these qualities make me an ideal penn state student, and I am sure that penn state is the right college for me to attend. Ive always rooted for the Nittany Lions, and I can picture myself studying on campus now.
if you guys could just help me out, i need to delete 23 chars, probably some errors in there, and my grammar isnt the best, so id like some help with that.
thanks alot!