Posts by trevgolfer

trevgolfer

Oct 13, 2009

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay Which is more important for success ------ [6]

Yeah talk about how one of the two has helped you with something also how it truly set you apart from the norm and how you have grown from that.

trevgolfer

Oct 13, 2009

Undergraduate / Uclers and football-UCs essay [8]

I agree with silent here, you mention quite a lot about football, but I think you should talk more about your background.

Maybe you could show how your family played a role in influencing you on your love of football and then connect it to your second essay so it would sound like more of a transition.

trevgolfer

Oct 13, 2009

Book Reports / Heart of Darkness/Apocalypse now Comparison [2]

Hello, I have an in class essay very soon, and i just need help as to whether my thesis correctly answers the prompt.

"Analyze the use of surrealism in both Heart of Darkness and Apocalypse Now to convey the meaning of 'the horror'".

Heart of Darkness and Apocalypse now both describe "the horror" as being the loss of civil morality through their use of surrealism in man's uninhibited violence and ungoverned greed.