Posts by JoseIRL

JoseIRL

Oct 1, 2015

Undergraduate / I am a Mexican, and I will show what kind of people we are, we are excelling [9]

Thank you @justivy, I already fixed some of these changes on my revision posted though. I did correct some parts, thank you for that :)

JoseIRL

Sep 27, 2015

Undergraduate / I am a Mexican, and I will show what kind of people we are, we are excelling [9]

Thank you very much @vangiespen, I will submit a few more essays to this site (Many more college questions!). This site is amazing, especially because of people like you! Best of Luck!

JoseIRL

Sep 26, 2015

Undergraduate / I am a Mexican, and I will show what kind of people we are, we are excelling [9]

I basically edited everywhere in my essay, so I'm just going to show the whole paper.

The community I identify with the most is with the Mexican community. Occasionally, I think about my nationality in school, for example: When the Mexican revolution is mentioned, when I fill out documents asking for my ethnicity, or when a classmate asks me about Mexico. Due to the fact that I'm a foreigner, where I come from becomes part of the discussion. People are interested in what they do not know. However, what do they "know"? I have heard that some Mexican stereotypes are that we drink tequilla, work in the fields and that we cross illegally the US border. But these are all stereotypes, it's just like any other place in the world, there are successful people and poor people. My mother worked very hard to become successful and give us a good life. We then moved to the US for finding a better education opportunities, but she had to leave all her work behind. In the past years in the US, I have realized that I am just a typical Mexican. In the US, Mexican immigrants struggle to make a mark in this country for they don't have many opportunities, and there is a tendency for Americans to prejudge Mexicans. I have realized I must change the world's impression of Mexicans by undertaking difficult challenges. I am inspired to represent the immigrant Mexican community by becoming a successful individual which would show the world that Mexicans are better than the stereotype they have in mind.

I really appreciate you guys taking the time to help me with my essay, is there anything I can help you with other than giving a "like"? :-)

JoseIRL

Sep 26, 2015

Undergraduate / I am a Mexican, and I will show what kind of people we are, we are excelling [9]

Wow, thank you very much both for your feed back. I will definitely revise my essay and show it to you. I appreciate your time and effort you're giving me

JoseIRL

Sep 26, 2015

Undergraduate / I am a Mexican, and I will show what kind of people we are, we are excelling [9]

Essay #1 (Required for all applicants. Approximately 250 words)
Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it.

The community I identify with the most is with the Mexican community, even more here in the US. Every so often it comes in my mind my nationality in school, for example: When the Mexican revolution is mentioned, when I fill out documents asking for my ethnicity, or when a classmate asks me about Mexico. Due to the fact that I'm a foreigner, where I come from becomes part of the discussion, people are interested in what they do not know. But what is what they "know". I have heard that some Mexican stereotypes are that we drink tequila, work in the fields and that we wear sombreros. But these are all stereotypes, it's just like any other place in the world, there are successful people and poor people. I was born to a powerful family, my mom was the director of the Integral Development for the Family, she was very successful. She was employing more than 1000 government employees. We were in the Upper class, I remember in my early childhood in Mexico having very big and expensive houses, money was never a problem. Years later, my mom left everything to get married in the US and to find a place where we could have a better future. We now lack .With this legacy of successful careers, I feel like I can and must continue working hard to be an outstanding individual. As a Mexican, I will prove that I can excel in my classes and beat all challenges in my way.