Undergraduate / Knowledge is useless if it is not shared with the world... [4]

Hello, this is my second draft completely rewritten for an application as an Undergraduate to U.T. Austin. Please tell me what would you change, add, or remove and why. Thank you so so much! :)

Knowledge is useless if it is not shared with the world, because what use can we give to it if we keep it for ourselves? Especially if we are talking about something as beautiful as Physics, the study of nature itself; how things work from the smallest to the largest realms of reality, why are things the way they are? I assert that education is the foundation of every citizen of every country, and that is why I am committed to become a researcher and professor along the way of finishing my doctoral studies, and I know that I need the best guidance possible to become a great researcher and professor, which is why I am applying to UT Austin. I believe that because of my conviction and efforts I am a really adequate student that would fit with the university's mission of excellence in education, research and public service.

Since I started college I looked for any opportunity I had to start obtaining experience to achieve my goals, whether in the field of research or teaching, as I did not want to wait until I had finished my degree. Nevertheless, I was told that I would not be able to, as I was just a freshman and had to gain more experience. I decided that I would take as many courses that would help me as possible, and do my greatest effort in getting good grades in them. I was able to complete my first 40 credits the first year and making it to the Dean's List. My effort was paying off and I was recommended as a model student to be a tutor for the Physics department and, one month later, as a Teaching Assistant; where I have really enjoyed being able to help other students understand a hard topic such as Physics, and I hope I will be allowed to continue these activities while I continue my degree. In addition, I was given the opportunity to participate in an honors research course with Dr. Ferrer this current semester.

I aspire to be a model professor for young scientists like myself right now. All of the best professors I have had at U.T. El Paso have one same constant, which is that they always assist me to take good decisions regarding how to complete my goals and all of them have told me to challenge myself and always try to obtain the best instruction available, which took me to apply at U.T. Austin. I know that at U.T. Austin I would be able to receive the best quality of education from a top research university and professors the caliber of Dr. Chiu, whose research involves my favorite Physics branches: particle, high-energy and theoretical Physics. Nobody can work completely on its own, which is why I volunteer to help other students even though I am no longer a tutor, and that is why I appeal to you: to give me the opportunity to receive great guidance to become the best student, professor and researcher I can be at U.T. Austin.

Undergraduate / Physics is beautiful... (statement of purpose for transferrence to UT Austin) [6]

Physics is beautiful; it is an area of the human knowledge that spans an enormous area in the sphere of human knowledge; mathematics, philosophy, every-day life; from the smallest to the largest realms of reality, and it is not easy. It is a study that takes utmost dedication, passion and constant training, as no one becomes magically good from the beginning. I realized this in my first year of high school (10th year in Mexico), which is when I realized that I had been slaking. I did not obtain the grades I wanted in middle school, and I knew that all my courses were only going to increase in difficulty. If I wanted to be the best person I aspired to be, I would have to start growing, and that there was no time to lose; I had lost some of it already.

I had always been interested in many, if not all, topics, and high school only offers a small portion of what there is to learn. I started to learn linguistics by myself and learn more about the same topics I had at school, as I knew that, in order to be able to study at a university that would fit my needs, I would have to excel in high school and college. High school was not the tough part, by far. If I wanted a better opportunity to develop myself, I knew that I had to leave my home country, and so I did. If I wanted to excel at Physics, I had to look for the universities that do so too. And so, my search took me to UT Austin. One of the crucial things a student has to experience in order to have a more complete vision of what he wants to do is to have the opportunities and the availability to choose from these opportunities. In my case, I expect to be able to explore the wide variety of Physics branches before deciding on what to specialize for graduate school, and I know that UT Austin is able to offer this opportunity.

All of the best professors I have known at UTEP have told me to reach as far as I can, and that means that it is going to be a challenge. Since I started college I decided to challenge myself with honors and extracurricular courses, like violoncello and social activism, as well as my major's courses, and to get as many credits as possible for my transference, which I was able to achieve with a 4.0 GPA.

I have always wanted to be a professor and researcher, because what is the point in gaining knowledge if you cannot give it to other people? And at the end of second semester my effort started paying off. I was recommended as a model student and hired as a tutor and then a Teaching Assistant, as well as starting to do undergraduate research. I was finally doing what I wanted to do (and I still am): obtaining new knowledge and helping other people that want to learn Physics. But I know that this is just the very beginning of a long journey that has taken me to UT Austin. I know that there I can get a better idea of all the ways I can develop myself in Physics and continue with this challenge.

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Besides changes, what can I add or should I remove? Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review this! :)