liviasama
Jul 23, 2009
Undergraduate / "Fleeting memories" - Are there any significant experiences you have had.... [16]
I'd just like to say that you're an incredible writer. My essay is on a similar topic, but you just expressed it so WELL!
Your writing is very relatable and honest, which should be appealing to any competent admissions officer. I would add a central anecdote to your essay, though, in order to make your thoughts more concrete. People pick up concepts through examples, so provide a particular experience that links to your essay, and I'd say your golden :]
Also, I agree with EF_Simone that there should be slightly less negative emotion in your essay. Think less self-deprecitation, and more realization. :)
I'd just like to say that you're an incredible writer. My essay is on a similar topic, but you just expressed it so WELL!
Your writing is very relatable and honest, which should be appealing to any competent admissions officer. I would add a central anecdote to your essay, though, in order to make your thoughts more concrete. People pick up concepts through examples, so provide a particular experience that links to your essay, and I'd say your golden :]
Also, I agree with EF_Simone that there should be slightly less negative emotion in your essay. Think less self-deprecitation, and more realization. :)
