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Name: Valerie Brouwers
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Columbiachick   
Oct 26, 2015
Undergraduate / A passion for volleybal - Columbia Supplemental essay [7]

Thank you both for your helpful responses!

I have revised it a bit and would like to know what you think of it now:

Volleyball has always been my passion since I can remember. We won regionals twice while I was captain and it is one of the things I am most proud of, but what I have really learned from volleyball is that winning a game isn't the learning experience of the sport. Losing a game can actually bring your team closer together and helps you learn to accept failure. What may be even more important is that volleyball teaches you to function as a team, to trust and to rely on your teammates.

Volleyball relaxes me and at the same time gives me the adrenaline that I need after I have been studying for a test. After playing, my body might be tired, but my mind is more focused than ever, which helps me to study for school afterwards.

To me, all of this makes volleyball much more than my hobby.
Columbiachick   
Oct 26, 2015
Undergraduate / A passion for volleybal - Columbia Supplemental essay [7]

Hey guys! I'm applying ED for Columbia and English isn't my first language so I was wondering if you have any advice for me about my essay down here:

Columbia supplemental essays: What single activity listed in the activity section of your Common Application are you most proud of and why? (150 words or less)

Volleyball has been my passion since I remember. When I was 10 I finally convinced my mom to let me play (she was hesitant as my sister got a hernia from volleyball) and it has been the best decision in my life so far. Winning regionals twice when I was a captain of the team gave me fulfillment, but what I have really learned from volleyball is that winning a game isn't a necessity. Losing a game can actually bring your team closer together and requires you to accept failure. To me, volleyball is much more than a sport. It relaxes me and at the same time gives me the adrenaline that I need after I have been studying for a test for three hours. After playing, my body might be tired, but my mind is more focused than ever, and thus helps me to study for my test.
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