AnthonyJ
Nov 17, 2015
Writing Feedback / "Is 18 the right age limit for voting?" Can you tell me if my essay is off-topic or not? [3]
Thanks, I appreciate your suggestion. Yes, you are right, I'm arguing that the age limit is not fairly set (should be reduced, although I didn't explicitly state it since the assignment was just to write a paragraph against). I examined your suggestions and I agree that that would make my paragraph better (although I think that the last sentence you suggested would be better fit in the conclusion, which was not required for me to write at the time). Unfortunately, my professor already failed me saying the previous paragraph is off-topic, regardless of me trying to explain my train of thought when I was writing this paragraph. Again, I'm grateful that you agreed (at least partially) with my opinion, TJLuschen.
Thanks, I appreciate your suggestion. Yes, you are right, I'm arguing that the age limit is not fairly set (should be reduced, although I didn't explicitly state it since the assignment was just to write a paragraph against). I examined your suggestions and I agree that that would make my paragraph better (although I think that the last sentence you suggested would be better fit in the conclusion, which was not required for me to write at the time). Unfortunately, my professor already failed me saying the previous paragraph is off-topic, regardless of me trying to explain my train of thought when I was writing this paragraph. Again, I'm grateful that you agreed (at least partially) with my opinion, TJLuschen.