Undergraduate / Advocacy for LGBTQ Individuals in the East - Common App "Why Transfer" [4]

Hello! I am working on my common app essay to (hopefully) transfer schools, and I would appreciate any and all constructive criticism! I have put tremendous effort into my essay, but I feel as if it doesn't flow properly, something is still missing, and my conclusion is nonexistent. Any and all opinions will be appreciated!

Notes:
My reason for transferring is my lack of intended major at my current institution - this is perhaps the prime thing I wish to get across.

There is a word limit of 650 (*cries*)
Prompt: Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.

"Ku waso qaniisyahow!" These were the words that were yelled at me as I walked home from a Youth Parliament meeting in Mogadishu, Somalia. Said in Somali, ku waso qaniisyahow roughly translates to "Fuck you, faggot." No doubt this insult was a result of my constant advocacy for LGBTQ rights, especially for youths, during weekly Youth Parliament meetings. This wasn't the first time I had experienced an incident such as this; the summer prior, while interning at the Ministry of Legal and Parliamentary Affairs in Egypt, two men on motorcycles threw rocks at me while I walked back to my host's house, primarily because I was advocating for LGBTQ rights there as well. These incidents never fazed me, however. Instead, I used these incidents to reinforce my goal to introduce policies and initiatives that would protect and secure the rights of LGBTQ individuals in North African, Middle Eastern, and South Asian countries.

Drexel University has imparted on me numerous gifts and opportunities: a dedicated faculty, challenging courses, and innumerable extracurricular activities. My fellow peers have been a truly diverse crowd, exposing me to cultures and traditions I would have never known about had it not been for Drexel's diverse student body. However, I cannot fully utilize these gifts and experiences, for the focal point that I must use to build upon these opportunities is missing; my desired major. I came into Drexel as an accelerated Physician Assistant program candidate, believing that, though I had tremendously enjoyed my governmental internships in Pakistan and Egypt, healthcare was the field that I wanted to embark on, and that I could eventually receive a second Masters in African, Middle East, and South Asian studies later on. My parents also played a role in my coming to Drexel as a Physician Assistant program candidate, as they dreamed for me to go into Healthcare, and I put aside my interests to fulfill their dreams. However, after my internship at the Youth Parliament of Somalia, I realized that even though I may enjoy science courses and medicinal studies, my true and indefinite passion lies within the fields of African, Middle Eastern, and South Asian studies. I wish to learn about the various cultures, people, and ideas that encompass these regions of the world, along with understanding their views towards LGBTQ individuals, and why they hold such views - is it religious, or does it have to do with their upbringing? Besides my internships in Pakistan, Egypt, and Somalia, my diverse ethnic background has also played a tremendous role in my infatuation with African, Middle Eastern, and South Asian studies, as I ethnically hail from Somalia, Morocco, and Pakistan. I've always yearned to learn more about these regions of the worlds, especially from a point of view other than my parents.

Besides lacking my intended major, I have no other complaints about Drexel. I have been able to smoothly transition into college life, and I have been met with enthusiastic professors willing to help at a moment's call, a diverse and friendly student body, extracurricular clubs and activities that cater to every type of student imaginable, and courses that serve to expand my breadth of knowledge. At Drexel, I am involved in the African Student Association, Muslim Student Association, and Pakistani Student Association, and am in the midst of starting a Middle Eastern and Arabic club. At my new school, I hope to be just as involved as I am at Drexel, plus some more; I wish to also join the newspaper editorial team, along with a Gender-inclusive fraternity, should my new school have one. In addition, I also hope to major in African, Middle Eastern, and/or South Asian Studies, and perform research on LGBTQ youths in these regions of the world with a faculty member. Finally, at my new school, I hope to be intellectually challenged and surrounded by fellow students who inspire me to work hard everyday.

Thank you all for taking the time to read this, I look forward to you opinions and critique's!

Best,
Hop3ful