DeniseHooi
Dec 20, 2015
Undergraduate / Mysterious Future Goals: Sentence structures and grammars are my prior enemy. [3]
Below are 2 paragraph in my personal statement. First paragraph was about my experiences and what I have learned from it. Second paragraph was about my future goals as a Chemical Engineer. I hope that you can help me on my sentence structure and my grammars as I am not very good in English. I hope the contents are good enough. I sincerely ask for your kind advise, thank you!
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Working with a business entrepreneur is fascinating, be detail-orientated is the prior skills to acquire, to think of the outcome and be creative during work is important as well. Dealing with various personalities has always been a good training for me to be sociable. I have experience working in a Japanese Restaurant where I learn a diversity of culture from the workers and customers there. They share their country and their experience with me which allows me to see the world in the simplest way.
In the near future, I could see myself working on environmental work that included renewable resources and green process. Our world is now badly polluted, many efforts of saving the environment are enforced now but it will be not enough to compensate to the harm we have did. Fruit yields had been badly affected by the unpredictable weather few years back due to pollutions. My father, who is a fruit planter and also the breadwinner in my family, struggled through that period of time so our family did go through a hard time. This has leads me to read on the achievements made for a better future by professionals around the world. I hope to be a part of the workforce to make more difference to the world.
Below are 2 paragraph in my personal statement. First paragraph was about my experiences and what I have learned from it. Second paragraph was about my future goals as a Chemical Engineer. I hope that you can help me on my sentence structure and my grammars as I am not very good in English. I hope the contents are good enough. I sincerely ask for your kind advise, thank you!
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Working with a business entrepreneur is fascinating, be detail-orientated is the prior skills to acquire, to think of the outcome and be creative during work is important as well. Dealing with various personalities has always been a good training for me to be sociable. I have experience working in a Japanese Restaurant where I learn a diversity of culture from the workers and customers there. They share their country and their experience with me which allows me to see the world in the simplest way.
In the near future, I could see myself working on environmental work that included renewable resources and green process. Our world is now badly polluted, many efforts of saving the environment are enforced now but it will be not enough to compensate to the harm we have did. Fruit yields had been badly affected by the unpredictable weather few years back due to pollutions. My father, who is a fruit planter and also the breadwinner in my family, struggled through that period of time so our family did go through a hard time. This has leads me to read on the achievements made for a better future by professionals around the world. I hope to be a part of the workforce to make more difference to the world.
