Speeches / 'I'm interested in many things' - Introducing Myself [9]

This is an example of what I'm write to introduce myself, i ask if its good or not ?

Hi,
My name is Ramzy Salem, I have 19 years old, I am from Palestine, I live in gaza
I'm currently studying at Gaza Community/Training Center at the last year of my study to get an associate diploma degree in business and office practice, after graduation and getting a diploma degree I will complete my study in Business administration to get a bachelor degree, I can say I'm the best student at my specialize with a rate of 94.5%, so I think it's a great opportunity to join to your university to study there to get many experiences and skills in Business Administration and in life in general.

However, I hope to be a successful businessman in near future also I'm interested in many things such as music, reading and writing short novels, watching movies, playing football, web development, create and modify pictures, music and video.