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abhishek3   
Feb 6, 2016
Graduate / "I will embrace today's difficult tasks, take off my coat, and make dust in the world" - improve SOP [18]

hi louisa, thanks for such a prompt reply. I think ill submit my application with more confidence now. I am grateful for your insights regarding my essays. I certainly learned a lot. I will definitely trouble you :-) if I need any such help in essay for my future applications as I now know you wont mind and are such a sweetheart ;-). Thanks a lot.

Regards,
AD
abhishek3   
Feb 6, 2016
Graduate / "I will embrace today's difficult tasks, take off my coat, and make dust in the world" - improve SOP [18]

hey louisa,
as you mentioned I have edited a little, although I didn't understand should I omit the final para completely?? Although I deleted the "my country...civil war" line but I have kept the para. Have a look at it.., and about the para of my previous studies should I keep it at where it is right now (as given below)?? is this format of the para positions in the essay exact???

thanks.
abhishek3   
Jan 21, 2016
Graduate / "I will embrace today's difficult tasks, take off my coat, and make dust in the world" - improve SOP [18]

hey Louisa, in 7 days you did a great help...thanks a lot ...I appreciate it...I think it is now good for submission...and can I change few names and submit the similar essay to one of the Canadian uni???? But unfortunately the 1st unedited Vague essay that I wrote was already submitted to US uni :-( ..I didn't knew about this website previously...not much luck there...anyways ...lets see for other uni...thanks a lot....best of luck to u

AD

When my grandparents successively died of neurological diseases while I was enrolled in masters classes ...
abhishek3   
Jan 19, 2016
Graduate / "I will embrace today's difficult tasks, take off my coat, and make dust in the world" - improve SOP [18]

Hey Louisa, thanks for the comments....I have done a little editing and made some minor changes....I would love if you could comment on this essay that I have made now....I think it have now answered some aspects that you pointed to be addressed...I think the composition and grammars are fine?????????

The death of my Grandparents while I was studying Masters with neurological disease unexplained and with so little information and treatment available to cope up with, had left me to question and ruminate about the little understanding. The ambiguous diagnosis of dementia without the knowledge of exact cause and the condition of my grandmother when she was in her last stage of her life were heartbreaking. She rarely recognized her own family and it was heartbreaking not only to us but to herself. The need for biological markers for early detection and prevention of these diseases is indisputable. Unfortunately there is still lack of such markers for dementia. So I promised myself to dedicate my life to the Neurodegenerative disease research; which in future could lead for a better diagnosis and prognosis.

Therefore to better understand the causes of Dementia I got to select a project called "The status of vitamin B12 in elderly person suffering from Dementia", in collaboration of Department of Biochemistry, Medicine and Psychiatry. Here I planned a cross-sectional study with 100 elderly over 60 years (50- patient and 50-age matched control) and screened the patient by Hindi Mental Status Examination (modified from MMSE). Blood sample were withdrawn from the subjects, after taking a written consent. Then a delayed competitive ELISA was performed to the serum for Vitamin B12 levels. The results were statistically evaluated and were predictive of cognitive decline (p<0.05) and I have published this outcome in Indo-American Journal of Pharmaceutical Research in 2014:4(04) (detail citation in CV). The result suggested the link between Vitamin B12 and Dementia but due to limited funds, infrastructure and time we couldn't work further into the molecular level of this condition. So, in future studies I want to work at the molecular level in these neurodegenerative diseases; ultimately leading to developing diagnostic and therapeutic mechanisms. Therefore, my decision to pursue M.Sc. in Molecular Mechanism of Disease has been driven by my eventual objective of meaningful research in the field of medicine which can be helpful for the betterment of life.

Although, I come from a small landlocked Himalayan country, Nepal situated in between China and India, I have always dreamed of traveling the world and to learn and share ideas. This desire has often led me to venture in the foreign soils to participate in different education system from what I had studied in my country. Hence, I joined the Rajiv-Gandhi University of Health Science, India; thousand miles away from home and completed my B.Sc. in Medical Lab. Technology. After completing my Bachelors in south of India I volunteered at Kanti-Children's Govt. Hospital, Nepal and then I travelled to the Northeast part of India completing M.Sc. in Medical Biochemistry from Maharishi Markandeshwar University. Luckily, during my stay at the later university, things have shaped on the lines of my thinking. The college curriculum for the Biochemistry major was vast included subjects like Molecular Biology, Biochemical techniques, Biochemistry of tissue, Metabolism, Endocrinology and inborn errors, Biostatistics, Immunochemistry, Clinical Biochemistry and Nutrition. I have also represented my University at the National level workshops and seminar by oral and poster presentations. Thus, living away from home will never be a problem, rather it will bring a better part of me as I enjoy being with people of different culture and perspective. So I am confident that I will be able to cope with the rigors of an International curriculum with ease and my determination to succeed will enable me to be among the best students.

Thus, after careful inspection of graduate programs offered by many prominent institutions, my eyes lingered on the research oriented M.Sc. program supported by Radboud University, Nijmegen. The program offered is itself highly integrated with combination of different courses which will unquestionably give me a broader perspective to the domains of research. When I saw that there were many researches being done in the Neurodegeneration and cognition science arena, this university attracted me .The ongoing research especially of Dr. J.A.H.R. Claassen and Dr. M.M. Verbeek about neurochemistry of neurodegenerative disorders particularly Alzheimer's disease is what I want to be involved with for my future studies. I want to increase my knowledge of the molecular levels of Alzheimer's which I was unable to do in the limited scientific and practical environment in my previous studies. I believe that the miRNA can hold the key aspects in future of diagnosis and prognosis in not only the field of Neurodegenerative disease but other diseases like cancers. I'm excited by the prospect of life-long learning, knowing there's always more to discover. Hence, after my Masters, I envision myself as a researcher working in lab preparing me towards a PhD. I am also excited about the new culture, environment and experience of a life-time with this study.

Furthermore, my country plagued by more than 20 years of civil war; which now is undergoing a transition phase and it requires skilled and highly trained scientists in health and research for future developments. So, I would love to establish myself as the corner-stone towards pioneering health and technology in my country and what better way than to use the M.Sc. as a platform provided by the Radboud University, Nijmegen. I have a vision to establish a R&D lab in my country where I can develop new age drugs and technology to combat the tragedies of neurodegenerative and cancerous diseases. I believe that the graduate program with prestigious scholarship provided is the true path to embark on a journey into the realms of medical research; enabling me to mould not only my career but also my character by boosting my morale.
abhishek3   
Jan 14, 2016
Graduate / "I will embrace today's difficult tasks, take off my coat, and make dust in the world" - improve SOP [18]

HI @vangiespen thanks for the insight ...I knew my essay was kind of vague and dull but couldn't edit it properly...this is the 2nd para that I have edited could it be placed...for the 1st and 3rd para ill be working on it ...it might take some time...again thanks very much...you are a savior....

"The death of my Grandparents while I was studying Masters with neurological disease unexplained and with so little information and treatment available to cope up with, had left me to question and ruminate about the little understanding. This led me to select a project called "The status of vitamin B12 in elderly person suffering from Dementia", where I planned a cross-sectional study with 100 elderly over 60 years (50- patient and 50-age matched control) and screened the patient by Hindi Mental Status Examination. A delayed competitive ELISA was performed to the sample withdrawn from the subjects, after taking a written consent. The results were statistically evaluated and were predictive of cognitive decline (p<0.05). I have published this outcome. I would love to work at the molecular level in these neurodegenerative diseases; ultimately leading to developing diagnostic and therapeutic mechanisms. Certainly, the ----graduate---- program offered will be a stepping stone towards my journey in these domains helping me meet my ambitions."
abhishek3   
Jan 13, 2016
Graduate / "I will embrace today's difficult tasks, take off my coat, and make dust in the world" - improve SOP [18]

Hello Everyone,,
This is the final draft of the essay that I have written for my PhD in UT Dallas and do not know how captivating it is. So I would love if any further insight and improvement that can be done...I appreciate your time...thanks...

"I will embrace today's difficult tasks, take off my coat, and make dust in the world. I will remember that the busier I am, the less harm I am apt to suffer, the tastier will be my food, the sweeter my sleep, and the better satisfied I will be with my place in the world. Whatever it offers; little or much, my time is now." The above stated philosophy has played an important role in the shaping of my goals and framing of my plans for my future and helping me take right decision of applying to University of Texas at Dallas. Choosing Biochemistry for advanced studies, I regard myself privileged to have strong liking in this field which is changing the concepts in medicine.

Although, I come from a town called Bhadrapur of a small landlocked Himalayan country, Nepal, situated in between China and India. I have always dreamed of traveling the world and to know about different people and share ideas. This desire for something new have led me to venture in the foreign soils to discover new culture and environment; with education system different from what I had studied in my country, Nepal. Hence, I joined the Rajiv-Gandhi University of Health Science, Bangalore, India; thousand miles away from home and completed my B.Sc. in Medical Lab. Science (2006/09) with distinction. After finishing my Bachelors in south of India I volunteered at pathology lab of Kanti-Children's Govt. Hospital, Nepal and gained some experience in the field of medical lab science and got interested in Biochemistry. Then I travelled to the Northeast part of India and pursued my Masters of Science in Medical Biochemistry (2011/14) from Maharishi Markandeshwar University, Mullana, India. Luckily, during my stay at this University, the things have shaped on the lines of my thinking. The college curriculum for this Biochemistry major is vast and touched several aspects like Molecular Biology, Biochemical techniques, Biochemistry of tissue, Metabolism, Endocrinology and inborn errors, Biostatistics, Immunochemistry, Clinical Biochemistry and Nutrition. The study at Department of Biochemistry and guidance from its esteemed professors was rewarding and laid a solid foundation in me over the subject. I have also represented my University at the National level workshops and seminar by oral and poster presentations of scientific reviews of various interests.

Similarly, excellence in any sphere of life can only be achieved through determination, hard work, preservation and dedication. After completing my M.Sc., I worked at the Biochemistry and Serology department of Samyak-Diagnostic Lab towards achieving Nepal 1st ISO 15189:2012 certification. Here I always aspired for excellence and quality but I felt the lack of in-depth knowledge of subjects which left the conceptual and practical skills incomplete. It is in this context that I would like to pursue a course by University of Texas at Dallas that will not only supplement my knowledge but will also provide a strong foundation to my study and practical field essential for my professional success.

The death of my Grandparents while I was studying a Masters with neurological disease unexplained and with so little information and treatment available to cope up with, had left me to question and ruminate about the little understanding. This led me to select a project called "The status of vitamin B12 in elderly person suffering from Dementia", where I planned a cross-sectional study with 100 elderly over 60 years (50- patient and 50-age matched control) and accessed cognitive decline in the patient by improved and revised Hindi Mental Status Examination (a questionnaire method). The aim of the study was to investigate the relationship between Serum Vitamin B12 and cognitive function in elderly. The study was conducted in Department of Biochemistry in collaboration with Department of Psychiatry and Medicine, MMIMSR, Mullana. A delayed competitive ELISA was performed to the sample withdrawn from the subjects, after taking a written consent. The results were statistically evaluated and were predictive of cognitive decline (p<0.05). I have published this outcome (Full citation in Resume). Still, I wonder what happens at the molecular level in these mechanisms and other diseases that are still doubtful and ambiguous; I would love to work on these.

So, after careful inspection of graduate programs offered by many prominent institutions, my eyes lingered on the research about molecular mechanism and mitochondrial role in Neurodegenerative diseases and Drug development of diseases supported by University of Texas at Dallas. The Graduate program is itself an integrated course with combination of different faculties to choose from and the diversity will certainly give a broader perspective to the ongoing research. Thus the splendid research facilities, the integrated course and electives, pleasing University ambience located in city Richardson of Dallas and history of the university striving for excellence are the factors which have motivated me to apply to your university. I strongly feel that the Graduate program at this prominent research institution in the United States is the right place to embark on an academic journey into the realms of Molecular Biology, Neurochemistry and Biochemistry; enabling me to mould my career to a great extent. I am confident that I will be able to cope with the rigors of an International curriculum with ease and my determination to succeed will enable me to be among the better students of your college. I would be grateful if I am offered an admission in to PhD program with possible financial support.

My country, after 20 years of civil war; is now undergoing a transition phase and heading towards a positive direction and it requires skilled and highly trained personnel for future developments. Similarly, United States of America being the top country in research and development, I feel that my education will be complete by its commitment to excellence and academic flexibility. Moreover, the diversity in the United States can also help me to learn about different cultures and work with people of different opinion and gain a new perspective about the world. The high technology and great intellectual minds will eventually help me become a better thinker and specialist in my field. Thus, after finishing my PhD, I envision myself as a faculty imparting my knowledge to the students and training other health personals. I'm excited by the prospect of life-long learning, knowing there's always more to discover. Furthermore, I see myself involved in research and contributing to the better understanding of biochemical and molecular system, if possible, by opening a much required Molecular research and diagnostic lab in my country Nepal.
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