atrain111
Jan 26, 2016
Undergraduate / "When you get to college and still have as much interest as you do now, contact me". Transfer Essay [4]
Thank you for the response! This prompt is as follows:
Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve. You can type directly into the box, or you can paste text from another source. (250-650 words)
I met with a free writing tutor at my library today, and we made some changes.
The first and second sentence of the second paragraph have been combined into one, shortening that portion. I also am going to find a way to reference a book or study that I did when I began to "read more, work better" ect.
The last sentence of the third paragraph has been omitted completely because it contradicts my transfer plan.
First sentence for the fourth paragraph changes 'sophisticated student body' to 'rigorous program, curriculum' or something of that nature.
In that paragraph, I am also going to provide an example of a time I was pushed and it helped me get better results.
I will include that I am looking for a smaller undergraduate student body in the fifth paragraph. In this paragraph, I will also include some of the other interests I wish to pursue that are not business, hence me wanted a more well-rounded curriculum/education/school. I will include that I have been in the midwest for my whole life, so could use a new location to bring new experience and opportunities. Lastly, I will end the essay by writing how and what I will contribute to my new school. I don't know I am going to work this, but I am working on it.
Thank you again!
Thank you for the response! This prompt is as follows:
Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve. You can type directly into the box, or you can paste text from another source. (250-650 words)
I met with a free writing tutor at my library today, and we made some changes.
The first and second sentence of the second paragraph have been combined into one, shortening that portion. I also am going to find a way to reference a book or study that I did when I began to "read more, work better" ect.
The last sentence of the third paragraph has been omitted completely because it contradicts my transfer plan.
First sentence for the fourth paragraph changes 'sophisticated student body' to 'rigorous program, curriculum' or something of that nature.
In that paragraph, I am also going to provide an example of a time I was pushed and it helped me get better results.
I will include that I am looking for a smaller undergraduate student body in the fifth paragraph. In this paragraph, I will also include some of the other interests I wish to pursue that are not business, hence me wanted a more well-rounded curriculum/education/school. I will include that I have been in the midwest for my whole life, so could use a new location to bring new experience and opportunities. Lastly, I will end the essay by writing how and what I will contribute to my new school. I don't know I am going to work this, but I am working on it.
Thank you again!