Kirsty
Feb 1, 2016
Writing Feedback / 1992 survey: television was popular in the evenings while radio were listened in the morning [7]
Hey Ethan, thanks for the suggestions!
Hey Ethan, thanks for the suggestions!
Kirsty
Jan 31, 2016
Writing Feedback / 1992 survey: television was popular in the evenings while radio were listened in the morning [7]
'Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.' this was given on the practice test and I assumed I only had to write the main features instead of everything on the graph? I am confused.. I was making comparisons by selecting and highlighting some key figures.. but ended up making the report seem incomplete and inaccurate? :/ should I cover everything on the graph by writing exactly how both lines develop? and I already have 4 paragraphs and 181 words, do I need more than this? I should use fillers less next time and focus on my content more. Thanks for pointing it out!
'Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.' this was given on the practice test and I assumed I only had to write the main features instead of everything on the graph? I am confused.. I was making comparisons by selecting and highlighting some key figures.. but ended up making the report seem incomplete and inaccurate? :/ should I cover everything on the graph by writing exactly how both lines develop? and I already have 4 paragraphs and 181 words, do I need more than this? I should use fillers less next time and focus on my content more. Thanks for pointing it out!
Kirsty
Jan 30, 2016
Writing Feedback / 1992 survey: television was popular in the evenings while radio were listened in the morning [7]
This is my first time posting here and I hope someone could give me some advice on my work for IELTS exam writing task 1. Your help is greatly appreciated!!!!!
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The graph gives information about radio and television audiences in the UK during a day in 1992.
As can be seen on the graph, television was obviously more popular than radio in the evening while radio was more popular in the morning. In general, more people watched TV than radio, since the percentage of audience that TV received were nearly twice the figure for radio.
To be more specific, the percentage of people listening to radio reached a peak at 8 am when almost 30 % of British turned on their radio, in the meantime, TV only had less than 10 % of audience. In contrast to radio, more people liked to watch TV in the evening, especially at 8 pm when nearly 45 % of British enjoyed various TV shows, whereas only close to 7 % of people listened to radio.
Besides 8 in the morning and in the evening when radio and TV received the most audience respectively, we can also observe another peak at 2 pm when around 15 % of audience spent their time on both media.
(181 words)
This is my first time posting here and I hope someone could give me some advice on my work for IELTS exam writing task 1. Your help is greatly appreciated!!!!!
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The graph gives information about radio and television audiences in the UK during a day in 1992.
As can be seen on the graph, television was obviously more popular than radio in the evening while radio was more popular in the morning. In general, more people watched TV than radio, since the percentage of audience that TV received were nearly twice the figure for radio.
To be more specific, the percentage of people listening to radio reached a peak at 8 am when almost 30 % of British turned on their radio, in the meantime, TV only had less than 10 % of audience. In contrast to radio, more people liked to watch TV in the evening, especially at 8 pm when nearly 45 % of British enjoyed various TV shows, whereas only close to 7 % of people listened to radio.
Besides 8 in the morning and in the evening when radio and TV received the most audience respectively, we can also observe another peak at 2 pm when around 15 % of audience spent their time on both media.
(181 words)
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