Posts by dangmanhtruong

dangmanhtruong

Feb 2, 2016

Writing Feedback / Blood sports - the cruel killings of helpless animals should be banned. To what extent do you agree? [5]

How about this? " As a civilization, man has come a long way from his barbaric life during ancient times. Yet, as strange as it may sound, blood sports involving cruelty to animals such as dog fighting and hunting, continue to proliferate in our modern times, making it a topic of debate in recent years. I am of the opinion that blood sports are cruel and uncivilized and man must no longer engage in cruel sports if he is to become civilized "

dangmanhtruong

Feb 2, 2016

Writing Feedback / Blood sports - the cruel killings of helpless animals should be banned. To what extent do you agree? [5]

"Thus blood sports have been increasingly increased " , but the question doesn't mention this. Are you sure its okay?

dangmanhtruong

Feb 2, 2016

Writing Feedback / Blood sports - the cruel killings of helpless animals should be banned. To what extent do you agree? [5]

The question:
" Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. Blood sports should be banned.

To what extent to you agree or disagree?"

Here is my introduction:
"Today's society has become civilized and sophisticated, the complete opposite of our barbaric ancestors who kill animals for fun. Thus blood sports have been increasingly under attack because of its brutality and the killings of helpless animals. I believe that it is an uncivilized practice and that it should banned from society"

Is it ok? Thank you very much