Undergraduate / Think Economics - help me with my personal statement [2]

In the whole essay I liked this part " the logical way of thinking in Economics is not guaranteed to be the most efficient, but it makes my thinking more rational, more leisurely." This expression shows your passion for economics.

I can't understand how "having only two instructors in the Laney College Economics department. " can be a cause transfer to University of San Diego. Just make it more precise that why you think you deserve to be at the University of San Diego. Write it allow the admission team to read it.

Your starting is very interesting, and your reference to rocket science make it unique. I would suggest that you must cut and make short your work at a ice cream shop . In the essay the only part is here that does not make sense. I didn't like the example. If you have any better example that can clearly show your meaning then write it or make that above example shorter and strienghtforward