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Name: Joshua Garcia
Joined: Feb 9, 2016
Last Post: Mar 4, 2016
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From: Mexico
School: Tamaulipas Autonomous university

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joshuagarcia91   
Mar 4, 2016
Scholarship / One brush at a time. KGSP Introductory letter. [7]

Hello again. I am sorry i have not being able to continue posting but part of my application involved taking the TOEFL test, and i focused on it a lot. I took what you told me and i want to share what i got so far.

I have always wanted to be part of something. Ever since I was a child I learned from my family that what you do, even if it is a small action, has an impact on the other. My parents for example, decided to dedicate their lives to teaching and have forged generations of valuable citizens for my community. My sister as a pediatrician helps to preserve the most vital base for the future: Childhood. These have been my models of life and following their steps is the path I have chosen.

My passion of contributing with society led me to pursue a Bachelor´s degree in Psychology. During my school years I became an active member of the student's community by participating in numerous congresses of Psychology and behavioral sciences, providing orientation to freshman students and forming study sessions during my free time. Alongside these meaningful activities I participated during my fourth semester in a project with a friend from another university in the Information Technology (IT) area, developing a computer version of several items from "The Thurstone Temperament Schedule", a psychological test commonly used in my country. After this collaboration I started to think about how much companies or government agencies can improve their process of personnel selection by adding these technologies in their daily jobs and save valuable resources in the process. After that event I decided to become an Industrial & Organizational Psychologist.

Searching for countries focused on technological development I found an online report that was part of the archives of the British Broadcasting Corporation (BBC) which related how the Asian financial crisis of 1997 impacted on a country leading it to the edge. Terms as strong as instability, bankruptcy and domino effect were all over the page. It continued explaining that shortly thereafter, on January of 1998, answering a call for help from their homeland, thousands of citizens donated their gold treasures giving away what they had in order to establish the basis for the future and inspiring the whole country to get ahead of the difficult financial situation in only a few years, rapidly growing and facing challenges without hesitation. With time it became one of the most competitive nations around the world: That country was Korea and since that instant I set my eyes on it.

During the rest of my career I received several awards such as recognition for obtaining the "Record of Outstanding Performance" Conferred by The National Center for Assessment in Higher Education (CENEVAL), scholarships regarding academic excellence and an Honorable Mention from my university when I graduated in 2014. All these honors made me realize that I had the potential, to be part of something meaningful and contribute to society just as my family has been doing for many years. After my graduation I became a volunteer for six months at the Community Counseling Center of my university and found my first job opportunity in March, 2015, working as a Human resources trainee for a company focused on providing security and administrative services. Our most important client was one the fastest growing ports in the country, the port of Altamira. There thanks to the support of my boss I managed to introduce a model of competencies oriented Interview and the modification of psychometric assessment according to the profiles required for the different clients. After a short period of time i got formally hired and gained the opportunity to take care of the entire hiring process for several projects, sometimes traveling outside the city.

The KGSP represents to me an infinite number of possibilities. Not only to achieve a Master's Degree or to be part of an amazing cultural experience, but also to create strong relationships between our countries and join a community of highly competitive professionals committed with the development of our society. It also represents a challenge. Learning Korean as a third language, Involve into research and separate from my family and dear friends are just some of the obstacles that come to my mind when I think about it, however I truly believe that in order to fulfill your dreams you must be willing to take these trials and turn them into victories. Sometimes you will not get all the support you need to achieve your goals; I was forced to quit my job to gather the required documentation for this application, it was difficult, but I do not regret my decisions. I want to be part of something, and the KGSP is the way I have chosen.

Thanks a lot in advance.
joshuagarcia91   
Feb 12, 2016
Scholarship / One brush at a time. KGSP Introductory letter. [7]

Hello Again. It has been almost two days since i startet to re-think the main idea of my essay... I guess i have found the core ideas but i am not sure how to start. I must thank you Hiddengrace because of this i managed to remember a lot more important events i have done to prove the points i was talking about.

So far i have this:

During my university days i always pursued excellence, It might be partially because my family has always been what we can call "Highly competitive" in this area, filling our home shelves with awards and medals and partially because i feel passion on my profession, Psychology. Anyways, my top priority was to achieve the best result as possible. On my third semester I got awarded with a scholarship that consisted on the exemption of the full tuition payment for getting the highest score among my generation by obtaining a final grade of one hundreed percent on every subject. I got my first job experience during the next summer vacation as a general assistant at one of the most important oil companies of the city i lived in. That could sound very important but sadly, my main function consisted on helping a pipe fitter to do his job by carrying their working tools such as polishing machines, and pipe pieces bigger than my head around our assigned area. His name was Michael and he taught me the true meaning of "Working hard". We had shifts of eleven hours a day on open areas with no covering from the sun, i remember i thought on quitting, but that was not the way i do things. With time, thanks to Michael i learned to use some of his tools and read the building plans for the pieces we made.I want to add here that michael was a Korean descendant and while we worked together I learned a little about his culture but im not sure why On my third week of work i got called by the head engineer of the project with the purpose of being reassigned to the administrative area where I finished my working period after two months. I realized then that many people´s experience and talent were not being seen by the responsible for them and that made me focus my path on the organizational psychology area. During the rest of my career i received awards such as a recognition for obtaining the "Record of Outstanding Performance" Conferred by The National Center for Assessment in Higher Education(CENEVAL) and an Honorable Mention by my university but i believe that the experience i got on that summer was what trully defined me and helped me spot South Korea.

and the next ideas wich are basically the same as the last part you mentioned were important:

After finishing a period of voluntary service in the Community Counseling Center of the Autonomous University of Tamaulipas I decided to take a pause on my academic life to focus on obtaining work experience. I knew from the beginning that getting a human resources job in a highly competitive area as my city would not be easy. Many of my colleagues and friends managed to quickly find jobs in education, mostly as substitute teachers; however, I chose to follow a different path. (I want to talk about how it took six months for me to find a job in order to connect this part). I found my first job opportunity working as a trainee Human resources executive for a company focused on providing security and administrative services. Our Most important client was one the fastest growing ports in the country, The port of Altamira In the state of Tamaulipas. There, thanks to the support of my boss we managed to Introduce a model of competencies oriented Interview and the modification of psychometric assessment according to the profiles required and after a short period of time i got formally hired for the company. I knew at that moment I was able to take the next step.

The part of why this scholarship is still on the oven, but i wanted to share this in order to get advices

Thanks a lot.
joshuagarcia91   
Feb 10, 2016
Scholarship / One brush at a time. KGSP Introductory letter. [7]

Hello Hiddengrace.

I really appreciate your response.

The first paragaph was a brief introdction about a personal experience i had that makes me believe i have always been very persistent and put effort in all the things i do. I wanted to keep that topic in mind in the second one by saying it is something i learned from my family and that particular characteristic has given us the strenght to overcome adversities.

I read once that personal experiences can sometimes be added at the beginning to use them as an example of your values but i can understand that maybe i took a lot of space and quite didn´t connect with the reader.

About the third one i pretended to keep a low profile, but since it is destined for a scholarship it will be be better to expand a lot this part.

I will start right now.

Thanks again.
joshuagarcia91   
Feb 9, 2016
Scholarship / One brush at a time. KGSP Introductory letter. [7]

Hello. My name is Joshua, From Mexico. I am writing an essay for the Korean Goverment Scholarship Program. It is divided in two Parts: The first one is a letter of self introduction. asking these questions:

o Your course of life, your view of life, study background, your hopes & wishes, etc
o Your education and work experience, etc., in relation to the KGSP program
o Your motivations for applying for this program
o Reason for study in Korea


So far i have made 3 drafts of the introductory letter and merged them into this one. I believe that the 3rd paragraph is very vague and consumes a lot of space, but i am not sure how to make it shorter. I would like to ask for some help and advices. i am also having a bit of a trouble for the closing part.

It was a January the 6th; I was also six years old. My father gave me a small gift bag for the "Three Kings' day", A very unique tradition in Mexico which is similar to Christmas day, inside of it was a box with only two objects: The first was a small egg-shaped ball made of a solid material similar to sand and the second one was a tiny brush. Even when I do not remember the exact words the instructions were simple: "Use only the brush to discover what is inside, a surprise awaits you". I still cannot exactly know what caught my eye about that simple but yet particular instruction nevertheless, I instantly took the egg in my hands and observed it carefully. I thought about the situation and the possibilities I had in order to open it, "what if the mysterious thing inside is very delicate and breaks if I smash it against the floor or if it gets damaged if I use water", I said. After my deliberation I decided to follow the rules and start brushing the sand in order to get to my goal. The next few days my normal habits changed drastically. I Became obsessed with the content of the egg and I wanted to get it as soon as possible, waking up earlier than what was normally used so I can advance as much as possible without wasting any time before going to school and sleeping late at night with the same purpose, one brush at a time. For the first time I had my heart set on something and it was up to me if either I could achieve it or not. Slowly, with every delicate brushing, a figure began to take shape in the sand. First a horn, then two legs and a tail, until it finally appeared. A small decorative figure of a dinosaur.

I come from a family that has always been highly competitive in the academic area. Both of my parents graduated from their respective Universities among the best in their generation. They decided to dedicate their lives to teaching. My sister, as well as them, finished her medicine school in similar terms and is now a critical care pediatric subspecialist. I, for example, graduated from university as a Psychologist with an honorable mention and have received similar recognitions for my academically outstanding performance, However that does not mean it has been easy for us to obtain, or it does not even imply we pursued these awards for the meaning of themselves, they represent great honor, yes, but we earned them thanks to one distinctive characteristic: Effort. Thanks to the example given to me by my family I can say I learned how difficult trying to achieve what you want can be and how important it is to keep moving forward and overcome any difficulty that comes in order to grow from every defeat.

After finishing a period of voluntary service in the Community Counseling Center of the Autonomous University of Tamaulipas I decided to take a pause on my academic life to focus on obtaining work experience. I knew from the beginning that getting a human resources job in a highly competitive area as my city would not be easy. Many of my colleagues and friends managed to quickly find jobs in education, mostly as substitute teachers; however, I chose to follow a different path. (I want to talk about how it took six months for me to find a job in order to connect this part). I found my first job opportunity working as a trainee Human resources executive for a company focused on providing security and administrative services. Our Most important client was one the fastest growing ports in the country, The port of Altamira In the state of Tamaulipas. There, thanks to the support of my boss, we managed to Introduce a model of competencies oriented Interview and the modification of psychometric assessment according to the profiles required and after a short period of time i got formally hired for the company. I knew at that moment I was able to take the next step.

Every single day for the last six months I have been waking up with only one thing in mind: The KGSP.

If a word defines the Korean Culture for me, that is effort. The simple fact

Because even if I fail I know I can get up again
The same effort that started to define me back when I was a child, one brush at a time.

(these are just ideas).

Thanks for your time in advance guys.

Joshua.
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