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Name: Franklin Tokam-Powell
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Last Post: Aug 21, 2016
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bobifrank   
Aug 20, 2016
Graduate / Struggles of an African in South Korea - IMPROVing MY WRITING for a future position [13]

Thank you ! Your corrections although helpful do not justify the comment: "I believe this essay can be enhanced with the focus on your sentence construction, you tend to pour a lot of ideas in one sentence, with the hopes that this will boost the sense or the thoughts of the essay, the truth is, it makes a very confusing sentence that affects the entire essay and this will bring the essay down."

I wanted to see you make less confusing sentences from my so poorly constructed sentences.
I'm glad I made mistakes I would have corrected myself if I took the time to edit the essay.
But yeah thank you. Please, next time keep your views to yourself if you lack points to back them up!
Thank you!
bobifrank   
Aug 19, 2016
Graduate / Struggles of an African in South Korea - IMPROVing MY WRITING for a future position [13]

Give examples of such sentences!!!! pick one and construct a better sentence out of it! Like the others don't just bitch about what you seem very concern about. Where have you travelled? What have you experienced? tell me. The content of my essay is what you attack mostly bring up arguments that clearly are very not based on fact. Are you African? are you black? Do you know any black person at all? Have you listened to a single African telling what their experience abroad was? have you compared it to others? You must be kidding because none of your argument is constructive at all. You said I haven't said a single positive about Korea which clearly is a lie. If you don't even have the intellectual honesty to recognise you jumped to conclusions too soon do not try and talk about things you know nothing about. I speak from experience and never have I lived in a place where they were so hypocritical about race. I believe in factual arguments you don't have any I'm sorry.

Who is "us" ? I've received 3 comments/reviews and only yours seems to be ridiculously focused on giving lessons on things you obviously Know nothing about.

I have lived both in Ukraine, Poland, China, Korea and the United States and I reiterate there is not a single place I hated as Korea. Because it is not an inclusive culture at all.

Anyone having lived in Africa is free to say whether he was accepted or not. I have had stories of friends who experienced violence in South Africa and I can tell you I joined in a campaign against that.

Why do you care that much are you Korean?
bobifrank   
Aug 19, 2016
Graduate / Struggles of an African in South Korea - IMPROVing MY WRITING for a future position [13]

You clearly haven't read the Essay at all or at least not in its entirety! And no, you don't go to a country expecting to be discriminated against it is simply not true! And who told you I didn't respect the law there? This is an editing forum, not a debating one. I think there is stronger discrimination in Korea than In China and Ukraine ! It is a fact! That country sucks for Africans! I have lived for years in Europe never have I ever felt the way I did in Korea. Why am I not writing about that? Why choose Korea instead?

if you want to edit my essay go ahead, if not please take you privilege and your racism elsewhere.
bobifrank   
Aug 19, 2016
Graduate / Struggles of an African in South Korea - IMPROVing MY WRITING for a future position [13]

struggles of an African in South Korea

A coworker recently asked me about my impressions of Korea, after having spent two years there and honestly it wasn't quite easy for me to give him a straight answer. My whole Korean experience left me with mixed feelings and it was visible through my reservations. In the rush of coffee making and ringing up customers at Starbucks where we both worked, an answer to such a question seemed like a pretty tricky exercise of acrobatic gymnastics. I wished to give an honest answer without coming off as rude or insulting to the country or its people. I, therefore, decided to write about it. I thought writing would be a better medium for expressing exactly what my feelings were about living in Korea. These are the struggles of an African in South Korea.

I had moved from Ukraine to China and from there to Korea, excited and hopeful about a country that-I thought, was a virgin land for black people and therefore one immune to discriminations. But I was extremely wrong. If I had to compare Korea to my previous places of residence, it was psychologically the toughest I had experience. Discrimination although very present in Korea is, however, subtle. Take for instance the labour market. Although Korea provides legal residence permit to job seekers who have studied in local institutions, it is almost impossible for most foreign students to actually secure a job. All jobs applications require a resume with a picture, an addition that allows employers to discriminate. Most Africans in Seoul or at least the ones I knew were either a student or in manual labour with the exception of a very small number of fortunate ones who had decent jobs. Africans work in factories, farms, and in the construction industry independently of their level of education. It is almost as if black people can't do anything but low-level jobs. In addition, even in the teaching sector -the most common job for foreigners in Seoul, it is rather challenging for black people to find schools that are willing to hire them. The reasons provided to decline to hire an equally qualified black person although subtle are not less insulting. "it is the Korean culture", or "the parents think kids will be scared if the teacher if black" you will oftentimes hear.

It is however, important to understand the cultural context in Korea before jumping to any conclusions. Korea have always been a very homogeneous society closed to anything foreign. In fact, Korea is with Japan one of the most homogeneous societies in the world. And despite Seoul's skyscrapers, its very efficient public transit, the economic progress, and the rush for technology, things still pretty much function the old Confucian traditional way. People still bow to greet even if it really is just a greeting. Elderly people are still revered, modern Koreans still care very much about social doctrines and being shamed by their peers and, a foreigner is a foreigner. In the past, people with dark skin were peasants who spent their time out on the sun farming. They were considered to be of a lower class just as the blacks today, which probably explains the enthusiasm for skin lightning in modern Seoul. These cultural aspects have transcended the ages to coexist with the spectacular modernity forming what seemed like an odd combination. All those elements shape how Koreans view black people. Africans are perceived as poor, uneducated and low. White Americans are considered desirable, cool and smart. It is very normal to read job posts that stipulate "European looking only" because Korean customer for instance prefer a white cook or waitress. A year ago, someone even accosted a fellow African friend shockingly asking him how he knew how to use a cellphone and wondering if they had any in Africa. I personally had never had such low self-esteem anywhere like in Korea.

Another element of discrimination is the culture of the looks that prevails in Korea today. Korea is the first place I was told I was ugly because I was black sometimes explicitly and very often implicitly.

Some will blame my position to an unfortunate experience that need not be generalized. I agree. I don't know the stories of all Africans in Seoul. I did have my share of misfortune that could have played a role. My best friend of nearly eight years had simply disappeared in Seoul cutting all contacts and putting me in the center of a legal battle with his landlord over his three months of unpaid rent. I paid half the money to be able to recover some of my belongings I kept at his. In another situation, while living alone, I woke up a night in pain from a chronic joint condition I have. I directed myself to the neighbourhood clinic when the nurse called the police because she was afraid of a black man walking in the hospital's hall. She chased me away like a beggar before running into one of the rooms. I ended up in the middle of a police investigation even though I could barely walk. I Agree, all these unlucky events could have affected my opinion but I lived similar situations in Ukraine, and worse. However, my general view of Ukraine is quite positive. I received a lot of support in Ukrainian, made a lot of friends that helped me overcome my challenges and most people made me feel very welcome and entitled although I was black. My skin color was rarely mentioned. At least never seriously. In Odessa or Kiev as long as you spoke Russian or Ukrainian you were Ť Molodoy Tchelaviek ť which translates as "young man". So, not all Africans living in Seoul will have a similar story to mine but the many I know can testify of this truth the situation isn't very encouraging.

Do I have anything positive to say about Korea at all ? Many I will say. The opportunities Offered by the Korean government to outstanding African student to come study in Korea is one of those things. I am very grateful to the Korean government for these opportunities. I benefited from one of those knowledge sharing experiences and can tell you I was thrilled. It has really changed my life by shaping my worldview and equipping me with skills I needed to better confront the demands of the labor market. Africans have a lot to learn from Korea. Korea's struggle to achieve development and good governance are outstanding considering where it started. I also met the love of my life in Korea to whom I recently got married. None of my misfortune makes me regret having lived in Korea at all. It was a learning experience that awakened a yearning desire for equality in me that I never had before. I think I was pretty candid about most things prior to moving to Seoul and going through what I have been through helped me understand I had to stand up and try to make things better.
bobifrank   
Feb 15, 2016
Graduate / 'I was never a computer savvy' - SOP TO GET ADMISSION in A MASTERS' of DATA SCIENCES PROGRAM [6]

STATEMENT OF PURPOSE TO GET ADMISSION in A MASTERS' of DATA SCIENCES PROGRAM

I was never a computer savvy. In fact, the first time I used a computer somewhere in 2001 as a teenager I was really scared to blow it. We never really had access to computers in my country XXXX at that time. We paid 2$ for an hour at the internet café and it was a luxury. Later, most schools had a computer room and we would learn basic Microsoft office for 30 minutes each week, with a terrible excitement.

I wasn't really sure I would have any interest in computers as an adult let alone programming. I moved to Ukraine to study economics for my bachelor's degree and bought my first computer with the money I made working in restaurants. Other than music and language I found a new interest in political economy while at university.

After a year teaching English and working for a talent agency in China, I was awarded the KDI School global ambassador scholarship to study public policy in Seoul, South Korea.

Public policy is a subject I am really passionate about. Although most of my siblings made it to college, our parents were working class people with no high school education. I come from a poor country were the government fails to provide basic public services to a population that lives mostly on less than a dollar a day.

I wanted to study development economics and understand why countries like South Korea achieved such progress with such speed while my country remained underdeveloped.
An essential part of my studies was statistical analysis. It quickly became a great interest of mine. I took a quantitative method class then an econometrics class designed for PHD students. I understood the persuasive power of data. It wasn't just speculating on a theoretical level it was testing and letting the data speak the truth. I was fascinated. If we were to change lives for the better with policy, it was crucial for me that we had quantifiable proof that what we do can work. My master thesis was research on panel data testing the correlation between energy policy in sub-Saharan Africa and energy poverty. I used programming with STATA to analyze a set of data from 24 countries with energy consumption as the dependent variable. The result of my research showed a positive correlation mostly, as my hypothesis suggested. I had earned a new passion.

However, my one-year scholarship program in Seoul wasn't enough for me to explore data science as much as I want.
I want to know more about data science to be able to work on broader topics including in the private sector. In the interim, I have started exploring R, logistic regression and other subjects online. As a policy analyst I am mostly interested in the quantitative analysis of policy issues. If I want to be convincing in my research I need to excel at data analysis. That is why I want to continue my education in data science.

The program offered by SMU covers exactly all that I'm curious about: data collection, data management, inference and even data mining.
I wasn't fortunate enough to be on the labor market in Korea but I believe a master's in data sciences at SMU will increase my chances in an industry I'm really passionate about. My ultimate goal is to have a doctorate degree in public policy and educate new generations of Africans on efficient methods of handling policy matters.

I recently moved to the U.S. and I can feel data science is more than a promising field. Not only is it applicable to public policy but also marketing, IT business, Healthcare and many other industries. As an African man I look forward to a century where data sciences can be used in order to make better policy both in the private and public sector. I am more than happy to be a part of such a revolution in business analysis and decision making.
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