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Feb 23, 2016
Undergraduate / Common App general transfer essay review. DDL March 1st really need help [4]
Thank you very much for everyone's help! I edited it a bit. Does it look better?
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When I proudly tell other students how awesome my organic chemistry professor is and how much I like this class, I am usually considered insane. It is a long standing rumor that this professor is a tough-examiner and a GPA killer. The rumor is indeed true, but it is the challenge that excites me and what I am seeking for. I enjoy the process of challenging myself, pushing myself to the very limit and making progress.
I was introduced to biology by my pet bird at the age of six. I read lots of books on biology to try to know more about it. What attracted me to dig further and further in biology is it reveals the secrets of the living world. The emergence of life from the basic chemicals is real magic to me. It becomes natural that I am obsessed with research on biology. In high school, an independent research project on corn starch based material introduced me to research. In university, by joining Palmer Lab, I participate in real research. In research, everything is unknown. No one knows the road so I can only stumble. Every step forward is a challenge but also a breakthrough. I start each experiment with the understanding that I will fail, but failures do not stop me - I am grateful that I have more knowledge on each possible, and I am one step closer to find out a through way.
It was my nature of seeking challenges that brought me to a university located at the other end of the world from my hometown. A world has more challenges than ever is presented to me. Getting adjust to a brand new environment is the first challenge. I meet great peers that make me feel home. I can explore broader and deeper academically.
My journey never ends. Settling down in my comfort zone is easy, but lacking challenge. Ease does not satisfy me but bores me. I begin to realize I am not challenged to my full potential. I spent most of time sitting along with three hundred of classmates listening to big lectures, even in upper division classes or lab classes. Professors are so busy with presenting the class materials and taking care of the other hundreds of students in the classes. I also regret that I lose the opportunities of learning from my great peers because the chance to express ourselves is limited. The small class size makes my Latin class enjoyable. Everyone has the opportunity to express his idea and does not need to worry about asking an out of box question may impede the other hundreds of students. I crave the affinity with faculties and classmates and the challenging ideas from my great fellow classmates. A fairly strict general education system restricts me in a few fields. However, my interest goes far beyond this restriction. I believe to be a successful biologist, mastering only biology is not enough. I also need insight into humanities and social sciences so that my work can better serve the human race. I also need the aid of technology, such as computer science to boost my work. I wish to get a taste of everything, to understand the world from different aspects, to challenge myself through exploring new fields.
By transferring, I once again go out of my comfort zone to embrace the challenges with excitement. I wish to be intellectually challenged by not only by course materials but also deep thoughts from smart peers. I wish to explore a boarder range of liberal arts and sciences. I crave for the opportunities to work in world-class labs to push me further into the unknown. I am prepared to enter a new world, a world constantly challenges me to break through my potential.
Thank you very much for everyone's help! I edited it a bit. Does it look better?
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When I proudly tell other students how awesome my organic chemistry professor is and how much I like this class, I am usually considered insane. It is a long standing rumor that this professor is a tough-examiner and a GPA killer. The rumor is indeed true, but it is the challenge that excites me and what I am seeking for. I enjoy the process of challenging myself, pushing myself to the very limit and making progress.
I was introduced to biology by my pet bird at the age of six. I read lots of books on biology to try to know more about it. What attracted me to dig further and further in biology is it reveals the secrets of the living world. The emergence of life from the basic chemicals is real magic to me. It becomes natural that I am obsessed with research on biology. In high school, an independent research project on corn starch based material introduced me to research. In university, by joining Palmer Lab, I participate in real research. In research, everything is unknown. No one knows the road so I can only stumble. Every step forward is a challenge but also a breakthrough. I start each experiment with the understanding that I will fail, but failures do not stop me - I am grateful that I have more knowledge on each possible, and I am one step closer to find out a through way.
It was my nature of seeking challenges that brought me to a university located at the other end of the world from my hometown. A world has more challenges than ever is presented to me. Getting adjust to a brand new environment is the first challenge. I meet great peers that make me feel home. I can explore broader and deeper academically.
My journey never ends. Settling down in my comfort zone is easy, but lacking challenge. Ease does not satisfy me but bores me. I begin to realize I am not challenged to my full potential. I spent most of time sitting along with three hundred of classmates listening to big lectures, even in upper division classes or lab classes. Professors are so busy with presenting the class materials and taking care of the other hundreds of students in the classes. I also regret that I lose the opportunities of learning from my great peers because the chance to express ourselves is limited. The small class size makes my Latin class enjoyable. Everyone has the opportunity to express his idea and does not need to worry about asking an out of box question may impede the other hundreds of students. I crave the affinity with faculties and classmates and the challenging ideas from my great fellow classmates. A fairly strict general education system restricts me in a few fields. However, my interest goes far beyond this restriction. I believe to be a successful biologist, mastering only biology is not enough. I also need insight into humanities and social sciences so that my work can better serve the human race. I also need the aid of technology, such as computer science to boost my work. I wish to get a taste of everything, to understand the world from different aspects, to challenge myself through exploring new fields.
By transferring, I once again go out of my comfort zone to embrace the challenges with excitement. I wish to be intellectually challenged by not only by course materials but also deep thoughts from smart peers. I wish to explore a boarder range of liberal arts and sciences. I crave for the opportunities to work in world-class labs to push me further into the unknown. I am prepared to enter a new world, a world constantly challenges me to break through my potential.
