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juancarlos

Feb 22, 2016

Undergraduate / "As for my fate, I'll accept it whenever Zeus sends it." Main Transfer Essay - the reasons [3]

Thus, I want to pursue the ~~interdisplinary~~ studies that OSU does not offer.
interdisciplinary

you may wish to use a thesaurus to replace or reduce your usage of the following words and in your paper:
I think, I don't, good, a lot, me, many, very, because, more, well, look, Everyone, some, think, does, want, better, like, are, any, prove, was, next, know, choose, about, but, so

juancarlos

Feb 22, 2016

Undergraduate / What would you like to achieve through this program? ASCENT international exchange program [2]

You may wish to use a thesaurus to replace or reduce your usage of the following words and/or phrases in your paper:
i think, good, very, because, things, many, more, do, we, think, look, new, is, are, important, about

One sign of an excellent writer is the use of transitional phrases and Your usage of transitional phrases is well above average!

juancarlos

Feb 22, 2016

Undergraduate / Common App general transfer essay review. DDL March 1st really need help [4]

I wish to explore a ~~boarder~~ (border) range of liberal arts and sciences.

you may wish to use a thesaurus to replace or reduce your usage of the following words and/or phrases in your paper like:
lots, big, very, see, awesome, most, me, make, go, end, easy, great, more, do, well, does, was, is, try, prove, new, know, enjoy, about, but, so

you can improve also in the use of transitional words.

Great usage of vocabulary words!

juancarlos

Feb 22, 2016

Undergraduate / What are the core skills and knowledge you hope to acquire by completing a degree in this major [4]

PLEASE CORRECT ME AND GIVE ME SUGGESTIONS!

200 words

What are the core skills and knowledge you hope to acquire by completing a degree in this major and how do you plan to apply these when you graduate?

My career interest has always derived from my desire to attract consumers or people psychologically, visually and culturally. The knowledge I hope to attain by completing a Bachelor of Journalism and Communication at University of Florida is a complete understanding of Advertising. I know that I will become a successful advertiser due to the program they have to offer. The program will give me strong leadership skills to become the best I can be. In addition, it can provide strong analytic skills, so I can give my service in different work fields. Also, by analyzing my strengths and weakness, I will learn more about myself and I will be able to understand the different markets that exist. To become a successful advertiser, I will need all the skills that the program at University of Florida has to offer. My goal is to create my firm to provide services of advertising; not only to sell the idea of a product, but also for social issues campaigns that want to let their voices be heard.

Please provide any other information about yourself that you feel will help this college make an admission decision. This may include work, research, volunteer activities or other experiences pertaining to the degree program.

I am a self-driven, motivated female. I have capability to work under extremely stressful conditions. Being in the position of working and studying have never been a restrained. I am used to work long and hard hours, around the clock. In fact, it had taught me the true meaning of responsibility and how to be multitask. Also, I have done an internship in an Ecuadorian university while I was in my senior vacations. On the other hand, I have been involved in community service since my freshman year in high school. My main task was to teach math to elderly people that want to finish their high school studies. Moreover, been an international student, with English as second language, have give me the opportunity to completely immerse myself in a new language. As well, the experience of living in a different country make me a multicultural with high levels of adaptability. I strongly believe that University of Florida is the place where I can make my goals come true.