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Feb 28, 2016
Undergraduate / My Commonapp Personal Statement - no stranger to hardship [2]
Hello, this is my final revision of my personal statement for my transfer app. Feel free to read and please comment some tips and help! I worked on this for quite some time, but I know there's weaknesses I either did not see or just could not catch. My conclusions are always weak, so please take a look. Thanks again!
My father was rarely around throughout my childhood, and to make up for it, he made my mom and me a promise that he would help cover for my college tuition. Although he had become more a stranger than a father to me, I was extremely grateful for the opportunity to choose a college without being limited by my financial ability. With that in mind, I selected the school that I felt offered me the most potential.
On March 31st, 2014, I officially became a Binghamton Bearcat. I immediately fell in love with the campus and social atmosphere. It soon became a home away from home, and I began to find an immediate interest in economics, as well as other fields of study. Just as everything began to fall into place, life threw me the most unexpected curve ball.
My father suddenly decided to forego his promise. After freshman year, he told me that he would no longer help pay my tuition. Soon thereafter, he once again disappeared from my life. At first, I couldn't believe what was happening and was at a loss for what to do. What's worse, I found all this out during my adjustment year of college, which made the whole ordeal particularly frustrating.
But I am no stranger to hardship. After the initial shock, I became determined to finish my first year with pride. Unlike in high school, I knew that I had to make the most of my time left at Binghamton, so I invested all my time to excel in academics and gain significant experiences. I made use of all the office hours I could to learn in depth, and I built relationships with my professors. I joined numerous clubs, making new friends and discovering new passions. I did so not only to keep myself busy, but also to maximize my education and experiences to help me succeed.
From the start, when my tuition issues came around, I began to think that I had no choice but to transfer. I was stuck in a limbo, and transferring seemed to be the only way out. Fortunately, the more I thought about it, the brighter my future became. I was able to discover that this would be a new chapter in my life. I recognized that by transferring, I could forget the pain my father put me through and no longer reminisce on the bad times.
Now, as a rising junior, I look to have a clean slate. And this time, I am entering with an important life lesson: it's not really about where I am that matters, but it's about how I use the opportunities at my disposal to become all that I can be. Although my college career started on the wrong foot, I know that I am capable of changing my life around and with that mindset; I hope to start fresh at a different university.
Given this second opportunity, I yearn to continue my ways as an active member within the student body. Regardless of the circumstances, I will strive to take advantage of the distinguished programs and professors, to equip myself for the future. And I will use my experiences, both good and bad, to contribute to the community. In the end, what I once considered a setback in my life has become a unique opportunity for something better, and I am ready to take the next step.
Hello, this is my final revision of my personal statement for my transfer app. Feel free to read and please comment some tips and help! I worked on this for quite some time, but I know there's weaknesses I either did not see or just could not catch. My conclusions are always weak, so please take a look. Thanks again!
My father was rarely around throughout my childhood, and to make up for it, he made my mom and me a promise that he would help cover for my college tuition. Although he had become more a stranger than a father to me, I was extremely grateful for the opportunity to choose a college without being limited by my financial ability. With that in mind, I selected the school that I felt offered me the most potential.
On March 31st, 2014, I officially became a Binghamton Bearcat. I immediately fell in love with the campus and social atmosphere. It soon became a home away from home, and I began to find an immediate interest in economics, as well as other fields of study. Just as everything began to fall into place, life threw me the most unexpected curve ball.
My father suddenly decided to forego his promise. After freshman year, he told me that he would no longer help pay my tuition. Soon thereafter, he once again disappeared from my life. At first, I couldn't believe what was happening and was at a loss for what to do. What's worse, I found all this out during my adjustment year of college, which made the whole ordeal particularly frustrating.
But I am no stranger to hardship. After the initial shock, I became determined to finish my first year with pride. Unlike in high school, I knew that I had to make the most of my time left at Binghamton, so I invested all my time to excel in academics and gain significant experiences. I made use of all the office hours I could to learn in depth, and I built relationships with my professors. I joined numerous clubs, making new friends and discovering new passions. I did so not only to keep myself busy, but also to maximize my education and experiences to help me succeed.
From the start, when my tuition issues came around, I began to think that I had no choice but to transfer. I was stuck in a limbo, and transferring seemed to be the only way out. Fortunately, the more I thought about it, the brighter my future became. I was able to discover that this would be a new chapter in my life. I recognized that by transferring, I could forget the pain my father put me through and no longer reminisce on the bad times.
Now, as a rising junior, I look to have a clean slate. And this time, I am entering with an important life lesson: it's not really about where I am that matters, but it's about how I use the opportunities at my disposal to become all that I can be. Although my college career started on the wrong foot, I know that I am capable of changing my life around and with that mindset; I hope to start fresh at a different university.
Given this second opportunity, I yearn to continue my ways as an active member within the student body. Regardless of the circumstances, I will strive to take advantage of the distinguished programs and professors, to equip myself for the future. And I will use my experiences, both good and bad, to contribute to the community. In the end, what I once considered a setback in my life has become a unique opportunity for something better, and I am ready to take the next step.
