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May 4, 2016

Writing Feedback / Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach young persons how to be a good parent [3]

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent.
Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.
Nowadays learning process mostly occur at schools so it is important for schools to focus on different aspects of learning like social behavior or being a good parent in future.

Although some say that it is not necessary to teach students to be a good parents; others, including myself, strongly disagree.
First of all, it is claimed that it is so essential for students to prepare to be a good father or mother, because people learn better when they are children. Most psychologists believe that students learn better than older people. It is usually claimed that social skills, just like language skills, can be learnt effectively at the early ages at school.

Another reason for this idea is that, if a parents of a child do not behave so good, teacher can learn this child how to behave as a good parent in future. For instance; when parents of a child don't do their duties as parents, this child imitate their behavior at his/her future life. With teaching useful tips about being a good parent, schools can avoid children from mimicking their parents behavior.

Finally, some say that school is the best place for children to learn about how to behave with their children in future, since students are not so busy in comparison with adults. In university and at work people do not have enough time to learn about these issues, but students have enough time to practice how to be a good person in society and family.

In conclusion, based on the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that, it is a good opinion to teach students about their future duties as a father or mother, because they learn better at these ages and have more time for learning. Schools can teach different skills that they need for their future. like how to behave with their children, how to prepare them for school, how to take care of them, how to learn them social skills and so on.

ad_ei

May 4, 2016

Scholarship / Study objectives statement for Public Policy and specialization in International development [3]

your text should have distinct paragraph it is to long
don't use pronoun I in your intro

ad_ei

May 4, 2016

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Youngsters have got little spare time and they are much under of pressure to study hard. [2]

youngsters have [got] little spare time don't use got in formal writing just say have instead
are much under [of] pressure to study hard of is not used here
All [of] parents in this world
They are proud to regard their children make good to be accepted in the esteem school or university I cant understand this sentence

ad_ei

Apr 28, 2016

Writing Feedback / Change is necessary because it brings creativity as well as progress in life [3]

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things others think change is a good thing

In some jobs around the world people do the same thing almost every day while in some of them people experience different situations at their jobs. Although some people prefer to do the same thing in their life, others believe that change is necessary in today's life.

First of all, it is claimed that doing different things can make people creative in their life.
Doing the same activity can stifle creativity in a person. When a person always does the same thing at his/her job he/she does not have motivation to think of new ways for doing jobs.

Another reason for this idea is that, one experiencing different activities in his/her daily life can progress in his/her work.
Peoples who like the change in their life or work always thinking about new ideas to make the situation better than before.
For instance; consider a person who is very active in his/her work he/she tries to think about a way to decrease the unnecessary expenses, an other example can be a person thinking about a way to increase the annual profit of the company. These kind of persons can be more popular and efficient in comparison with employees who just do the same activities and are not creative.

On the other hand, some people prefer to do the same activities because they believe it is more easier and needs less energy.
Most experts argue that doing the same activities needs less energy than doing different ones. It is sometimes claimed that people who do the same activities at their work are less worried about their tasks at work.

In conclusion, based on the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that change is necessary because creativity , as well as progress in life, can be the consequence of doing different kind of activities and variety of works.