matiullahghafari
Jun 2, 2016
Graduate / Living in a "fantastically corrupt" country of the world. Statement for MPA University of Calgary. [7]
Please have a look on my revised statement i have sent the reference to the bottom of the page and tried to shorten the sentences and also gained some good things about my country would you please guide me on grammatical issue as per the grammarly i have 15 advanced issue like 2 improper formatting, 5 word choice, 4 wordiness, 2 word order, 1 perposition use and 1 clarity.
Can you imagine living in a country which is called fantastically corrupt country, ranked 2nd insecure, 3rd most corrupt, 1st in narcotics production and 24th poorest country; I and 34 million of people do live. Welcome to Afghanistan. Most of the world might not know that this country is also the land of opportunities; the US geological survey has estimated a net worth between $900 billion and $3 trillion of untapped mines; the country is known for producing some of the finest agro-products like; pomegranates, grapes, apricots, melons, dry fruits, nuts, and exports totaled $2.7 billion in 2012. This is also the land of scholars like Avicenna, Rumi & Sayed Jamal Uddin with 5000 years of history and culture, natural water resources required by the region with beautiful and attractive nature. There is a great hope for young professional to develop, learn and experience new things in different sectors; like mining, power, energy, agriculture, water, import & exports and good governance.
I have understood several things from my life experience such as adversity & poverty from migration, extremism, oppression, tyranny and terror from war; disbelief & instability from corruption; hope & power from education; ability to change & pleasure of sharing joy from work.
Working in a corrupt and war thorn community has its difficulties & challenges but as a committed citizen and an energetic young, I have accepted this challenge. Analyzing the presidential election of Afghanistan where Mohammad Ashraf Ghani a professional person has been able to gather people and acquire their trust by providing logical explanation of community problems and solution without being a warlord in an extreme war thorn country has motivated me more than ever and showed that if you work hard, be specific, have plans and have practical version of solutions; the people is on your side or simply if you know where are you going everyone will follow you.
I have graduated with a Bachelor of Administration & Diplomacy from Law & Political Science department of Balkh University and have gained more than seven years of full-time experience with different national and international organizations. Some of my professional experiences include my service, with General Directorate of Municipal Governance where I worked as a Public Administration and Public Administration Reform Advisor to help the municipalities in reform, change management and institutional capacity building. During the tenure of my service I have learned and practiced institutional gap and needs assessment, development of required training and conducted training and capacity building sessions at different levels. Some of my major achievements at the municipal level were the development of citizen forums where the local citizens participated to openly talk and discuss with the Municipal officials in terms of the proper development of the community, monitoring and expenditure of municipal fund, prioritizing of funds expenditures in the required community development projects. The senior management of municipality "Mayor" has appreciated my achievement with two recommendation letters.
The new government of Afghanistan and the international community are insisting on the restructuring of the government policies, systems and approaches to be transparent, effective, efficient and responsive to citizens of Afghanistan. Implementation of good governance is the only solution to achieve these milestones. People are always the major sources of input to newly developed systems. I want to have a very active participation in the new change management, institutional restructuring and engineering of the Government of Afghanistan; therefore, I want to attain the required skills and knowledge to achieve my goals. Master of Public Administration (MPA) is considered to be one of the best qualifications which enriches professionals with the required knowledge and skills to practice good governance at any required levels of careers. Canada being an example of good governance and one of the most developed countries could be the best option to pursue my higher education and learn best practices which can be applicable to my country.
Based on a detailed research I have conducted throughout the international universities in Asia, Europe, and America, I found that the University of Saskatchewan could be the best option to get my MPA.
I hope my education will help me achieve my career goals and contribute to my country's development and sustainability.
Please have a look on my revised statement i have sent the reference to the bottom of the page and tried to shorten the sentences and also gained some good things about my country would you please guide me on grammatical issue as per the grammarly i have 15 advanced issue like 2 improper formatting, 5 word choice, 4 wordiness, 2 word order, 1 perposition use and 1 clarity.
Can you imagine living in a country which is called fantastically corrupt country, ranked 2nd insecure, 3rd most corrupt, 1st in narcotics production and 24th poorest country; I and 34 million of people do live. Welcome to Afghanistan. Most of the world might not know that this country is also the land of opportunities; the US geological survey has estimated a net worth between $900 billion and $3 trillion of untapped mines; the country is known for producing some of the finest agro-products like; pomegranates, grapes, apricots, melons, dry fruits, nuts, and exports totaled $2.7 billion in 2012. This is also the land of scholars like Avicenna, Rumi & Sayed Jamal Uddin with 5000 years of history and culture, natural water resources required by the region with beautiful and attractive nature. There is a great hope for young professional to develop, learn and experience new things in different sectors; like mining, power, energy, agriculture, water, import & exports and good governance.
I have understood several things from my life experience such as adversity & poverty from migration, extremism, oppression, tyranny and terror from war; disbelief & instability from corruption; hope & power from education; ability to change & pleasure of sharing joy from work.
Working in a corrupt and war thorn community has its difficulties & challenges but as a committed citizen and an energetic young, I have accepted this challenge. Analyzing the presidential election of Afghanistan where Mohammad Ashraf Ghani a professional person has been able to gather people and acquire their trust by providing logical explanation of community problems and solution without being a warlord in an extreme war thorn country has motivated me more than ever and showed that if you work hard, be specific, have plans and have practical version of solutions; the people is on your side or simply if you know where are you going everyone will follow you.
I have graduated with a Bachelor of Administration & Diplomacy from Law & Political Science department of Balkh University and have gained more than seven years of full-time experience with different national and international organizations. Some of my professional experiences include my service, with General Directorate of Municipal Governance where I worked as a Public Administration and Public Administration Reform Advisor to help the municipalities in reform, change management and institutional capacity building. During the tenure of my service I have learned and practiced institutional gap and needs assessment, development of required training and conducted training and capacity building sessions at different levels. Some of my major achievements at the municipal level were the development of citizen forums where the local citizens participated to openly talk and discuss with the Municipal officials in terms of the proper development of the community, monitoring and expenditure of municipal fund, prioritizing of funds expenditures in the required community development projects. The senior management of municipality "Mayor" has appreciated my achievement with two recommendation letters.
The new government of Afghanistan and the international community are insisting on the restructuring of the government policies, systems and approaches to be transparent, effective, efficient and responsive to citizens of Afghanistan. Implementation of good governance is the only solution to achieve these milestones. People are always the major sources of input to newly developed systems. I want to have a very active participation in the new change management, institutional restructuring and engineering of the Government of Afghanistan; therefore, I want to attain the required skills and knowledge to achieve my goals. Master of Public Administration (MPA) is considered to be one of the best qualifications which enriches professionals with the required knowledge and skills to practice good governance at any required levels of careers. Canada being an example of good governance and one of the most developed countries could be the best option to pursue my higher education and learn best practices which can be applicable to my country.
Based on a detailed research I have conducted throughout the international universities in Asia, Europe, and America, I found that the University of Saskatchewan could be the best option to get my MPA.
I hope my education will help me achieve my career goals and contribute to my country's development and sustainability.
